by Myalyn
I didn't expect the next chapter to arrive so quickly. I'm impressed with where you're taking this story.. I hope she sues the cops for manhandling her! Or, I could just wait and see your version =P
WOW! Didn't think this story could get any better but OMG! You are doing a great job writing this! I CANNOT wait for the next chapter! OMGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG!
OH WOW! That was one of the BEST stories I have ever read on this site... I love all the chapters and I am in complete suspense waiting for more. Your doing an amazing job :)
That's bullcrap. She's NINETEEN. Legal guardian or not, unless this is set in some country where the laws make nineteen year olds minors, she's an ADULT and there's no legal standing for assaulting her in a police station to take her somewhere. Otherwise, the story's entertaining.
This should have all been cleared up once she told them that she willingly went with Mark...with the exception of possible breaking and entering and assault charges between the players, but the direction you took it in doesn't make sense.
Unrealistic and she's 19. No legal guardian after 18. Your story could have been a lot better. Do your research!