Say My Name

Finally

Now, this is what i'm talking bout. There isn't much good interracial stories on this web site, only a select few. I can proudly say that this one hits the mark. Gives me a good breath of releif to know that someone can give a plot rather than just rushing into the sex part. Keep goin.

AAAHHHH

it's so good, why did u have to make it so short though. anyway can't wait for the next chapter

More Please!

This is a great start!!!! Can't wait to read more!!!

oi vey!

Well I hope there's more of this very soon!

phew......

Echo the earlier thought....great start! Shame to let it finish there.... go girl and get it done!

hot hot hot

I am already loving Nick. Don't make us wait to long!!
WCD

love it

im loving it, cant wait to see where this goes

MMM MMM MMM......

....there are just no words. Excellent start!! Don't leave us hanging now....update soon!!!

Good start ...

but please try to make your chapters a little longer. It's irritating when authors write such short teaser chapters that barely complete a page. Think of it as a good thing that your readers are wanting more instead of telling you to quit. And I agree with the other posters: Nick is sounding extremely yummy already. Interested to see where you take us with this one.

Wonderful Start!!!!

I loved the fact that the first chapter was short...it was a great introduction. Keep up the good work..I look forward to more... just please don't make your reader wait too long.

OK this is it!!

I have read a number of the interracial stories on this site involving black women and have found them wanting. This story right on the money!! I can't wait to read the rest of it.

Gimme More

Good start, can't wait to read how Nynia takes down this white guy!!

umm

wow 6"6 is giant!..this sounds like it will be very interesting.

DAMN!!!!

I think, no I know I want to meet this man!!! I can't wait to finish reading to see where this story leads.

Ummmmmm

Smoking hot!!!

Damn DAMN!!!!!!!!

DAMN!

That is the hottest shxx I have ever read and I've read a lot. What? In a 1,000 words, you've managed to convey hot & wicked arousal.

Euh...Talking about first impressions.
This story go it.
I liked it.


B.

Constructive Criticism

I think that it is better to introduce the physical features of characters through the perspective of another character. I think that it gives the characters an element of humility, and it doesn't really matter if we, the readers, think that they are attractive. We will design them in our minds for the most part.
I also thinks it helps convey that the two characters are drawn to each other.
Right now they seem very to just be two conceited people, and that's really all.

One word

HOT.

Great begining

The title peaked my interest, but the first chapter is what is holding it.
As for the description of the characters, it pretty much fit with every other story on lit, to me, the characters sound like 2 good looking people who know it.

Love it!

Love this story!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Right...

Yeah..it's hot..but TOO hot.. for me, for a beginning that is. sucking on her ear lobe when they just met? uh...where they do that at? ima need to go read a more realistic story at the pace this is going they gonna be fucking in the first three lines of the second chapter.

Hell he has me a little flustered and I'm just reading lol

Well damn where can I Get one like him Lol pretty good so far.