Say My Name Ch. 02

Good Job!!!

The sexual tension is palpable through my laptop screen and I loved every moment. I just hope that the sex is worth it! But I'm quite sure it will be!! Keep them coming!

OMG!

This is slow tortue, and I love it. This story is incredibly Fucking HOTTTT, and they have not even had sex yet. I'm wet with anticipation waiting for the next chapter. Please make it longer. I love it, you're an awsome writer.

Luv IT!

I simply love this story. The intimacy between to characters is HOT! Please do me one small favor, make the chapters a little longer. Thanxs and continue the good work.

Hottt!

But seriously, make the chapters longer. Your readers love your story so please make them slightly longer if you can.

Where is the Rest of It?

OMG! That was wonderful when are you going to submit the rest of the story? I can hardly wait. It is very good and I want more.Please hurry, I want to know if it will be as good as I remember it to be. haha

More Please!

Loved it...more please!!!!

Dammit all....

WTF????? If you don't stop playing with my emotions and finish this damn thing. How reading something so short has me this wet, I don't know. But hats off to you! Looking forward to more.

MMMMMMMMMMMMM

MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMYummmy

I'm almost there !!!!!

Shit, you sure know how to hold a girl on the edge, I am quivering!

I wanted to like this but...

truthfully this was terrible. After the gritting and bearing it through the first chapter I thought for sure this would get a little better and it kind of fell short.
I think with a good editor and a couple passes with proof reading this could be soooo much better. Normally I don't get all bent out of shape with bad spelling or grammar (I can't tell you if I saw any of this in your story because- ) your character referencing was all over the place and you jumped around in perspectives, it wasn't consistent.
I think your lack of consistency was distracting. I couldn't tell what you were trying to accomplish with the plot/dialog and accessory characters.
You would have done better to skip the preliminary confusing Micah/her husband's banter (worst line Micah "Girl you gonna get you some")
and straight to Nick fingering Ninya (sp?) in his car. But why would she think it was a bad idea to be with him (mind you after she had an orgasm in the seat of his car after teasing herself in front of him)?
I hope that you've improved as a writer I think that your imagination is probably really big and I know I sound like an asshole for this critique so I apologize but I hope that it comes off as constructive criticism instead.

hmmm

Hmm, no idea what the other comment was about lol, from where I am seating this story is hot hot and hot!!!
this is not the first time i have read this story just my first time commenting

I agree

with Anonymous' comment on how he/she wanted to like it, but it was terrible... I'm sorry. The overall idea was hot, but try getting an editor!

It's On

The clock has started...

oh my!!!!!!

Gosh.

ONE WORD

DAMN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Goodness Gracious

@dee2045 I think the phrase you meant was HOT DAMN!!!!!

lol she got hers, so I say round one goes to her

yes!!!!

Love the build up

That was just selfish