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Anna and Ramone
I am impressed so far. Looking forward..
great
Great story, I wouldn't have expected the rape. Thanks
good start
This chapter is a nice set-up. (Although, it would have been nice for the reader to know in advance that this was to be a first chapter of more to come.) It'll be interesting to see how you tie together all these opening elements.
-- KK in Texas
Great beginning!
I didn't expect the rape either. That totally threw me for a loop. This story has much potential and could easily be made into a really great long story. It has all the right elements from the characters to the story line. Looking forward to this one.
Thanks for the nod.
The final draft came out well. Good start. Thanks for the editing nod.
Really good but......................
It was WAY to short!!!!! Would have been better if it were longer but I guess I'll have to wait till the next chapter comes out huh. Really good though!!
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