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Dang...
it has been awhile. I almost forgot about this series. I'm insanely jealous; Nigha has TWO men who love and want to cherish her, and has given her beautiful children. Wouldn't want to be in her shoes now though, with the decision she has to make. The choice may be taken out of her hands though if Brett ever recovers and finds he's not the father of the new babies. As much as I love Jason, you gotta feel for Brett. All he's guilty of is being a loving husband and great father, and what does he get? Cheating and a coma...geesh, talk about harsh.
End it already!
I was hoping the story wouldn't take the predictable ending but it is pretty obvious who she's going to choose.I never realy liked nigha just for the fact that she had love and family and threw it away for a quick f***.It is obvious that your going to use the I love you but i'm not in love with you postion( I thought you be more original).I hope that you do make nigha suffers some consequences for her action. If your going to allow her to walk into the sunset with Jason please don't allow her to take Brett's kids with her. He shouldn't have to suffer because she decided to cheat and please don't turn Brett into the bad guy to justify Nigha actions
Everybody's right
Totally agree. I think your writing's amazing. You take a situation that I absolutely wouldn't condone but you've kept me so absorbed with the way you unfolded the story and presented these characters that I can't turn away. Glad you're finishing it off. Everybody can't get the ending they want, so I'm just curious to see how you'll be ending it. Will Brett get his own story? Any interesting plot turns for Bria and Kane?
TORNED AND CONFUSED
THIS STORY HAS ME TIED IN KNOTS. THERE IS A PART OF ME THAT SAD FOR JASON, BUT AT THE SAME TIME I FEEL HE BOUGHT THIS ON HIM. DID REALLY THINK HIS AFFAIR WITH A MARRIED WOMEN WOULD END HAPPILY EVER AFTER?
Brilliant
Wow, this is amazing you haven't pulled any stops out to build a complex situation.
Your characters are rich and feel real without falling into any 'all good' or 'all bad' categories. It would have been easy for you to paint Brett as an awful husband. I respect the fact that you've built the tension very gradually giving the situation greater realism.
One of the things I think has been lacking is the dynamics of the relationships with between Nigha and her two sons. They feel like shadow characters so far yet they are two of the four children who will be affected by whatever outcome. They are old enough to make sense of their mothers infidelity how much will Nigha lose in terms of her relationship with her eldest children?
Small detail but where have they been while their parents have been in hospital and how will they react to their sisters birth? I've been wondering who has been looking after them. As drawn out characters thy would bring another dimension to the situatin Jason faces. If he is asking Nigha to leave her husband does he a) welcome her eldest children b) expect her to leave them for him? Sorry for posing so many questions but you draw the readers into such a complex moral maze!
This is an amazing story you've created a scenario where there is no easy happily ever after while exploring sensual and realistic experiences of how love can grow beyond boundaries of marraige etc. I look forward to future chapters. ps I pressed the wrong button when I tried to vote as I've never done it before. I give you top marks for being such an accomplished writer who simultaneously satisfies my literary and erotic fictional experience of reading.
Life & what comes with it.
Love the story, thank you for futhering it. So Nigha cheated on her husband and got pregnant by another man, shit happens. I love the story keep going I want to see what happens.
I'm very clear Nigha must suffer and Jason too
I want retribution, and you can make it as bad as you want. I have no desire to see Jason happy at this point or Nigha for that matter. I roll like that, good story, filled with conflict and cheating and cheating hence my need to see them pay. Thanks again for the update
LOVE HURTS
NIGHA AND JASON WERE WRONG NO IFS ANDS OR BUTS ABOUT IT. IT WAS SAID BY SOMEONE DO NOT MAKE BRETT OUT TO BE THE BAD GUY AND HAVE SOMETHING NEGATIVE SHOW UP ON HIM. WE MUST ALWAYS REMEMBER EVERYONE HAS SKELTONS IN THEIR CLOSETS. IT HAS NOT BEEN MENTIONED IN THE STORY BUT THAT DOESN'T NECESSARLY MEAN HE IS INNOCENT AND PURE. THINK ABOUT IT IF SHE IS MADLY AND DEEPLY IN LOVE WITH HIM AS SHE CLAIMS NOTHING AND NO ONE COULD HAVE OR SHOULD HAVE COME BETWEEN THEM. I AM A FAN OF JASON, SORRY. I DO NOT CONDONE THEIR ACTIONS, BUT THE STORY IS ABOUT JASON AND HIS LOVE FOR THIS WOMAN RIGHT OR WRONG.
Girrrrrrl!
Jason is smooth! He went Rhett Butler smooth. OOOOOH! I love his character!
Day-um!!!
"You've tried to fight it for so long; aren't you tired?" he leaned toward his left and rested his cheek against hers and spoke barely above a whisper directly into her ear. "You belong to me and I won't let you go; now or ever. When all this is done and you've chosen to come to me freely; I'll make it all worthwhile. With me is where you belong and I live for the day when you're by my side and the nights where you're writhing under me, screaming my name."
Do the damn thing, Jason! You better get your woman!!!
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