You’re the writer and “m just a reader but I’d like to give you a suggestion. In an earlier story you used three astericks to separate a different timeframe. In these stories you go back and forth between what Luanne is telling you and whats happening now. If you stuck in those *** it would offer a break and allow us to know when you’re talking about the past and when the present. I really like this series and read each one religiously, but I think it would be easier for the average reader to follow what was happening. Keep writing.
Thank you for your comment. I have used that technique in many other stories and, somehow, forgot to do it here. I logged on to post the sequel, but now I'll hold off until I can reformat it. Maybe tomorrow morning I'll have it ready (probably not) and I'd appreciate your comments on Luanne 11.
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You’re the writer and “m just a reader but I’d like to give you a suggestion. In an earlier story you used three astericks to separate a different timeframe. In these stories you go back and forth between what Luanne is telling you and whats happening now. If you stuck in those *** it would offer a break and allow us to know when you’re talking about the past and when the present. I really like this series and read each one religiously, but I think it would be easier for the average reader to follow what was happening. Keep writing.
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Thank you for your comment. I have used that technique in many other stories and, somehow, forgot to do it here. I logged on to post the sequel, but now I'll hold off until I can reformat it. Maybe tomorrow morning I'll have it ready (probably not) and I'd appreciate your comments on Luanne 11.
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