All Comments on 'My Favorite Holiday'

The thing in your mouth is spelled tongue. Otherwise, a nice story.

This is my first submission, so I'd appreciate anything constructive anyone might offer. Thanks about the spelling thing, tongue is one of those words I always fuck up. But glad you liked it otherwise

Nice, but not Hot... sorry. It was a very good first submission though and the more you write, the better you'll get -- I promise! Even if a word looks like it's spelled correctly, check on dictionary.com to make sure. I found this out the hard way after having submissions rejected for misspellings. You might want to get a volunteer editor (there are A LOT of them) to go over your next submission. S/he can make changes and suggestions that might have never occured to you to polish your story and get it a higher rating. Keep writing! NEVER get discouraged by criticism and negative Feedback!

i just found this story, and it really is good. wish i'd found it sooner. thanks...