All Comments on 'Amusement Park Ride'

by Sir Galahad

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AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
WOW

Great heat and pace. Some trite phrases like "the red-hot magma of my climax" but I can ovelook those for the other 99.9% that was white hot. LOVED how they emulated the porn scene!

Bravo!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago
Okay but not overwhelming

I like your writing, but this time I lost my concentration totally when you wrote about her "rotary breathing" skills. I've heard of circular breathing that allows you to inhale through your nose while you push air out form your mouth, but rotary breathing? Does she rotate like a giant kabob on his dick while breathing or what? In short, you've done better (I LOVED Hurrah for the Pirate King and Little Ms. Marker)

CurtisElmoreCurtisElmoreabout 9 years ago
That was truly fantastic

Great characters, wonderful setting, a lovely paramour for "Dick" and some really top-notch sexual action. Bravo!

rightbankrightbankover 8 years ago
parts were entertaining

others not so much

more of a

what I did last summer essay

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Loved it

Had a Spanish lady from Amarillo. Damn near killed me. Oh to be 23 again

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I believe that it is possible to write erotica that has a plot; that erotica, properly crafted, can be an art form. Sex should be part of the plot, not just the object of the exercise, in anything other than a short intended to incite lust. I'm pleased that people out there e...