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Not a bad story......
but, sure could use an editor. the spelling and gramatical errors made it very hard to read.
Find an editor
It's sad to see a good story hampered by mistakes. Find an editor to help you with your next submission.
A Little Editing....
might help, but it is still a good tale. I look forward to reading more installments.
Errors?
There were errors? This story was soooo hot that I didn't even notice them! Fabulous writing! MORE!
wanna be writer
just another wannabe writer that can't finish what they start i wish this site would delete unfinished stories after a year or so then ban the writer from ever posting again
More please.
Please continue this unique story.
NICE START THANKS
god what a waste of time and space.
an unfinished story is worse than no story at all this needs to be deleted.
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