- All
Comments (4) - Add a
Comment - Send
Feedback Send private anonymous feedback to the author (click here to post a public comment instead).
| Literotica Toy Store ADULT TOY & DVD STORE FAST & DISCREET |
Literotica XXX Webcams 24/7 LIVE CAMS - FREE PREVIEW W/AUDIO! |
Literotica Adult Movies STREAMING ADULT MOVIES PAY PER MINUTE |
~
I'd change Par-tay-ing and cuddling. They seem out of the place in this poem. One's too cute and the other is too... well, it's too par-tay-ing. lol The rest of the poem is really good. :)
...
Sizzling poem, but I agree with Evie when she mentions "Par-tay-ing" "cuddling" in her comments. Good stuff and I mention your poem in the PF&D.
Gosh
Letting the alchemy of your poetry sink in I broke the thermometer while passing 100C.
Sorry I could not locate your writes before as I was new on the site.LOVED IT.
Turning Lead to Gold
And prose to poetry. Lovely poem. Evokes the wonder of new love.
Fx
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Alchemy or
More submissions by Safe_Bet.