by rondori
I don't agree with the previous review/comment, but respect the diversity of our preferences as readers.
Your initial narrative laid out some very clear indicators that the two main characters may have a preconcieved ideas about each other. The story then progresses to share aspects and likes of each perrsonalities while at the same time celebrates the sexual coming of age of Bethany. You takes time to show a real friendship building between the two.
This was a beautiful story of two people. Do I condone a married man getting his rocks off with another woman? no but I took time to read the story in it's setting, time and context. Your narrative feels authentic and the sex scenes were erotic and hot. Some of the pictures do make Bethany look afraid or even terrified and the angle of the images give an out of propostion set of balls, but hey its fiction right! I'll look out for the next installment.
Needed to be more tense...like 'What if they got caught?'
The pics were great but not clear enough to 'WOW'a person.
Just about the best...ask an editor to see what I mean.
Loved the amount of luscious illustrations...could have wished for more?
And you sir are not a critic; or at least not a literate one.
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Rondori,
What a great love story with sexy as hell illustrations. Super!
Jack
Love interracial period pieces. Especially one with so many dimensions. Please tell me there are more illustrations like these. Who is the artist?
especially when the opposition tries for. a lay-up. TK U MLJ LV NV
SO much fact weaved in with the story that is wholly or part fact. I was stationed at Ft. Carson in the early sixties and was on evacs to Fitz in those days. I had relatives in Denver and spent a lot of time there and was at Fitz for several weeks altho stationed with AMEDS USAH (Rose Army Hospital). Great story and sensual and descriptive. Thanks you, Aragana