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All Comments on 'Birthday Blow'

by cts2003jg

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Scotsman69Scotsman69over 15 years ago
Sorry, you have a very long way to go....

..before you can write erotica. This just doesn't do anything.

MilliemoonMilliemoonover 15 years ago
Good Start

For a first attempt this is pretty good. Concentrate on improving the dialogue and you will be almost there. The idea was hot, and without ideas you don't stand a chance. So work with them and you will get good reviews.

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