A Beautiful Love Story

I hope that you do continue this story

It seemed that the last of the story was a little rushed, so i would hope that you could recap a little and then write about what will happen to the couple and their desire to live as man and wife.
Thank You for the very good story. ...Rich

Continue Please

I hope you continue with a few more details thank you, great story.

The story is done---No more needed

As to the story itself the dialog was stilted and unbelievable--The plot was nice -- The 8 inch dickey did nothing for the story

Needs Work

Read the dialogue aloud and, as you listen, ask yourself if anyone ever actually talks like this. Written English and spoken English are very different and your characters speak in written English; it is so unnatural that it seriously detracts from the story. Compare "Mark, I have wanted you for such a very long time. Please make love to me now!" to "Mark, I've wanted you for so long. I can't wait. Fuck me now!" Don't be insulted by the criticism; just keep working on it.

good start....

It seemed a bit stiff and awkward, especially the last couple of paragraphs. You need to loosen up a little bit and not be quite as formal. Lets face it, incest is not a stiff and formal arrangement, so the writing about it shouldn't be either...otherwise an excellent idea and overall a good story.

If you think it's unfinished,

then, by all means, WRITE MORE!

Offspring?

This is one of my favorite authors and I enjoyed this story. But the idea of offspring bothers me just a bit.
Is'nt that a bit dangerous?

Beautiful

Just Beautiful.
As another reader commented before, this romance deserves to be continued.

continue

continue

Sisters could be fun

My sister and her girlfriend took care of me one weekend when I was about 5. They both tried to do sexual things with them but I didn't understand. A couple of times when I was about 9 my sis (7 yrs older than me) let me play with her. Then she got married at 18. Her husband and I have never gotten along well together and the only time I talk to my sister is for business matters. If her husband ever dies I might try to see her and see what could happen. I am 70 now. I can well identify with this story.

nice

great build up but a quick finish

Good job :D!

I hope you'll continue this story. It has a great plot! Well,good luck.

please

please write more about this story

unrealistic

way to unrealistic i really don't think any guy would ever call his sister after a major falling out especially after such a long time most people especially guys hold grudges and would not want to bring back any bad feelings or take a chance of starting a new fight if he had to go back to town he would make sure to avoid her at all costs keep it atleast somewhat believable and realistic please this isn't the fantasy area

Great

Great continue with more stories. I begin you to, they are amazing

it was fantastic

this was the best story i read so far it could have been a little bit longer and more detailed it was a great story just finish it and keep them coming
jerry

a terrific story

It's great when a brother and sister finally get together in the way lots of them have always secretly desired. They know that each of them has something between their legs that can do the other a world of good. The brother's got a nice stiff prick and a pair of balls that never quit. His sis's got an adorable little coochie that needs something nice and stiff to fill and stretch it. They discover the sheer delight of bringing prick and coochie together, and joy of the boy unloading his young balls up between his sister's legs, shooting her great big twatfuls of his creamy semen. It's wonderful that they go on to make a life together as a married couple, the brother will be pouring gallons of his potent sperm up his sister's sweet cunt, fucking lots of babies into her belly. Truly a beautiful story of love and lust.

CONTINUE?

HELL YES, WITHOUT A DOUBT, PLEASE DO CONTINUE THIS!

nice story.

keep writing, I'm looking forward to reading more. Thank you, Dave.

Good start

It all seemed to wrap up too quickly. But it is a good story I hope to see more.

Loved it.