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Your hate isn't prepared for me,
when I wrap what I now call family
around your pitiful frame and hump back at you.
I like what you did with your anger in this poem. Many emotional poems seem out of control. This one certainly isn't. Good way to express yourself.
"Cant Rape the Willing"
No, you can't, Grrr!
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Hang on in there girl you're better than any one of your 'rapists'
Fuck em!
Heh, this is great. Your defiance is beautiful.
lovely
I just plain love your style: the true strength really rests within ones mind.
congrats.
Nice!
You're such a strong person and it shines through in this poem!As timmhmm says, "Fuck 'em!" I need to save this one to favorites and use it in my anger therapy. (learning to get angry-- not anger management)
Huh?
This is erotic poetry? Apparently erotic means different things to different people.
Well.
So, I didn't like the poem. I am all for empowerment, but I feel like you didn't even treat YOURSELF with compassion in this poem. Your language is stilted, and while you have a nice, broad vocabulary, it feels like you chose words because they were the biggest ones, not because they were the most interesting or appropriate. How many times have you actually used the word "Succor" in conversation? It's an inherantly melodramatic word, and it reeks of artificial Voice. I'd suggest trying out a more conversational tone. Your style, right now, is the equivalent of announcing very loudly, "ALRIGHT, EVERYONE, I AM GOING TO SHOW YOU A POEM, NOW (MY POMES. LET ME SHOW YOU THEM)" Also, your sentence structure and punctuation are fairly poor, and not in a way that comes across as intentional.
I bet writing this was therapeutic, and I'm sorry for whatever has happened to you, in the past, but I don't like this poem.
*****
It may not be erotic, but it's good.
WHO PISSED HER OFF
and her manliness is cause for alarm, TK U MLJ LV NV
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