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Cant say more than I said in Chapter 4.
She is dysfunctional and any marriage or other partnership she falls into will fail. I said she would get pregnant to keep the "relationship" going so she had him to provide for her and the kids. Everything I said in Chapter 4 is coming together and this marriage is doomed before it begins.
Love it!
Aww! That was a good wrap up! I loved this story alot! Cant wait for more of your stories! Thanks!!
Just one word.......AMAZING (and a few more)
THis has to be one of my fave stories on this site. You are one talented author and this story was so sweet. It shows that there really are happily ever afters.
Another Wonderful Story
I really enjoyed this story. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Excellent
Leave it to the master to provide an entertaining read. Another fine story from one of the best!
Very good romance
This is a great read!!!
Great Read!
This is one great read!--Makes up for some of the TRASH that we put up with!
Very nice story, well done
I have really enjoyed this story. Not much sex, but the stor line and characters made up for it.. A pleasure..
Very nice!
Very nice; the entire story, not just this chapter. Good work. -- KK in Texas
I enjoyed it
Good story. Happy ending. It all works out well. A little to predictable but that's ok, it was fun to travel along with these characters.
Misty eyes
With misty eyes,a smile and warm heart the story came to a end. Thank you for your posting and I will long for the next time. God Bless and may He be with you and yours until the next time. Thanks again! JRJ
Excellent
A great story from start to finish. I do wish that these could be posted at once instead of chapters. Thanks again.
What a tonic
It was so nice to have a story about love.
Always Good!
Thanks for your stories, always well done, interesting and I never feel like a idiot for reading them. You are one of the best, at least for what I like to read. Please keep writing!
A good idea
I'm afraid I found the central character totally unconvincing. A man whose whole family (and his best friends) have told him that this woman is good but has had an unfortunate time through no fault of her own. Yet he still doubts her and by implication therefore the family and friends.
The dialogue is even more unbelievable. Molly has to be the most erudite 4 year old on the planet. As for Jess:'God, I was pissed. I looked over at Bear and Ryan who were standing there. "Listen guys, I've had enough of this guy's shit. If for any reason I should lose a fight with this asshole, I want you to promise me that you will take whatever we have packed up and leave the premises. Positively no interference. Can I have your word on it.?"'This is how an ex-army sergeant speaks when he's pissed? I half expected him to say to Kyle "Excuse me you are irritating me dreadfully. I may lose my temper shortly. Please desist."Overall the story was too rambling. Description and dialogue both needed tightening up to make them more readable. A few punctuation errors were no real problem.
Too bad real life can't be this simple
and good
... WOW!!
What an INCREDIBLE writing ... keep doing a GREAT job of writing!!
H.
Excellent writing!
This is more like a novella than an erotic story. Lots of characters, plot development, etc.
My writing has more of the in and out sex stuff.
BTW, I am in Mentor, near Cleveland.
love it
I lov this Story so much and like the ending. I dont think any man could do that were she had so much in her past but i like lookin to the future
Again, I love happy endings.
I can understand his reluctance, she had a poor history after her Mother died. The drug deal would have really scared me off. I'm glad it worked out. Yes, naysayers, I realize it is just a story and I like the way DG brings them together.
FAN BLOODY TASTIC !
Oh yeah! You hit a home run with this one! A bit corny but hey I loved it! That's what matters most to me. I have said before and I say it again a few stories really jump off the page and you wrote them! Thank You! .....Love you all! Bye. Greg. Oh 10 stars = 100 % of enjoyment! Bye.
JUST BLOODY GREAT WOW..WHAT A STORY
loved how the tale unfolded...just a pity they couldn't sue the auction firm over that scum stealing from her...after all..they employed him....loved the characters especially Bear....what a great guy to have as a friend....a really good tale of love found and getting back with her family was special.....one of you best yet again
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