by regularguy13
This has meandered down a dark alley and lost all sense of direction. Was that meant to be erotic at the end? Rough boy nearly rapes her and then they all go home...sorry but you lost the plot and I lost it too.
It is good that people can take erotic fiction and make it a real story by adding tension, as much as I feel horrible reading it, it is no different than Bambi's mother getting shot. It is horrible, but it makes for you feel for the people in the story and emphasis with them. It is much, much better than porn that glamorizes abuse.