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Hayden's Hero!

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous08/24/08

love the story did not like the adam monroe part

did not like the police chief wiggum Simpson charater or the che use of adam monroe other then that it was good

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by jacobreynolds09/28/08

Well Done

Great subject, Hayden is a sadly underused hottie on literotica. It was well writeen but i have a suggestion:

Try and make the sexual aspect of the story longer? draw out the events so that the characters ecstasy can be translated better to the reader. If you are stuck with ways to do this, you can either make the characters tease each other, or simply add more description.

I cant wait for the seaqual (PLEASE MAKE ONE!!!)

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by Anonymous12/01/08

Simpsons

I really enjoyed the simpsons drop at the end

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by Anonymous12/01/09

good read

overall ok read but definatley need to extend (go into detail) next time, that would help a lot

keep on writing about hayden :)

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