Way too short. Wham, bam, thank you mam. Needed a lot of padding out.
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Anonymous08/24/08
Great story but too short
Very well written and a good storyline...you got right to the point a little too quickly.. Should have built up to it
with some other adventures before that...but do keep writting !.!.!.!
I disagree that a story should be padded just to make it longer. I do agree that a little more detail would have made the story better but it was a nice little vignette as is.
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Too Short
Way too short. Wham, bam, thank you mam. Needed a lot of padding out.
Great story but too short
Very well written and a good storyline...you got right to the point a little too quickly.. Should have built up to it
with some other adventures before that...but do keep writting !.!.!.!
short and sweet
I disagree that a story should be padded just to make it longer. I do agree that a little more detail would have made the story better but it was a nice little vignette as is.
Not too short!
This story said all it had to. Why spoil it by padding it?
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