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by Anonymous

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by WickedEve08/29/08

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There's some naughtiness in this poem but the line that really stands out is this one: She will be my man tonight.

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by Anonymous08/29/08

not bad

lol. sperm bank opens at nine.

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by normal jean08/30/08

hey!

now, this is a good poem. You show skill in avoiding some of the traps people fall into when attempting erotic poetry and you seem to get better with each submission.

The one line I didn't care much for was the "a splay"... that just didn't feel right. Other than that, well worth a fiver. good job, SB!I have been enjoying reading you the last few weeks. Keep up the good work.

:)

NJ

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