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loved it!
You do express yourself very well and have given me huge insight into your lifestyle. i only have one tiny nit-pick, and that is the abbreviated form of 'through' you used thru...
I'm just a stickler that way, when no other abbreviations are used, that one seems out of place. Changing it would not change your meter or meaning...just a suggestion. :)
enjoyed the read!
NJ
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That last stanza is fantastic.
My, my....
Oh, but honey.....that last stanza is poetry on it's own. That sucker's got legs! It could stand by itself. :)
hell yeah
This piece is exactly as it should be: tight, hot and simple, like the fuck it describes. There's clear affection here, too, which makes it even hotter. NICE!
Excellent
I know the feeling - you express it so well.
Fx
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