I enjoyed this very much, do I see a sequel in the distance?? I sure hope so. A few minor grammatical errors no big problem and very easy to fix. Keep up the good work, I notice quite a few additional stories that I need to check out.
Good story ... too short. Think you can lengthen it any? Thanks.
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Anonymous11/21/13
So, what's next?
Loved the story. Really hot. It's Mom and the sister's turn now. Cunt-on-cunt. Nothing better.
Janice in Tacoma
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Anonymous02/13/14
real shame
this could have been a real good story IF it had been properly edited and finished.
as is we only get the second chapter out of four or five. it would have been real nice to get the whole story not just a small unedited sample.
English
Wow!
This is a very hot story! In spite of small errors in the English, this is a very well written story and a very good read.
Well done.
I enjoyed this very much, do I see a sequel in the distance?? I sure hope so. A few minor grammatical errors no big problem and very easy to fix. Keep up the good work, I notice quite a few additional stories that I need to check out.
Brill
Nice story, keep it up!
MORE! MORE! MORE!
Good story ... too short. Think you can lengthen it any? Thanks.
So, what's next?
Loved the story. Really hot. It's Mom and the sister's turn now. Cunt-on-cunt. Nothing better.
Janice in Tacoma
real shame
this could have been a real good story IF it had been properly edited and finished.
as is we only get the second chapter out of four or five. it would have been real nice to get the whole story not just a small unedited sample.
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