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Can I Kiss You?

byGeordiegal©
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by jackofthedawn09/03/08

Good first effort. Needs work.

Fill in the "friend" and "lover" characters a bit. Give them names.

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by Anonymous09/03/08

Great start!

Looking forward to the next part! and yes, names would definitely bring this story out to life more! Great job though!

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by msjay12309/04/08

AWESOME WORK!!!!

That was really great start. Please let there be another chapter!!!!!! Truely amazing!!

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by Daniellekitten09/04/08

Definitely need to know who the friend and lover

are. But it's a good start.

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by Geordiegal09/13/08

thank you

Thank you to all who read this - its my first published story.

Even more thanks to those who left feedback here or sent it to me. All feedback taken onboard.

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