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Good first effort. Needs work.
Fill in the "friend" and "lover" characters a bit. Give them names.
Great start!
Looking forward to the next part! and yes, names would definitely bring this story out to life more! Great job though!
AWESOME WORK!!!!
That was really great start. Please let there be another chapter!!!!!! Truely amazing!!
Definitely need to know who the friend and lover
are. But it's a good start.
thank you
Thank you to all who read this - its my first published story.
Even more thanks to those who left feedback here or sent it to me. All feedback taken onboard.
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