All Comments on 'Older Interest Ch. 01'

Hot, where's Chapter 2 ?! Love the way you bring lingerie into it, let's have more description of what she is wearing. Keep writing, I'll keep reading.

Not great could use some work, you write like a kid, was that on purpose?

...but you really really need to improve your writing and/or get a proof reader to help. Very tough read, do some polishing up and it will be a much better story.

Shit that was hard to read. Having to stop & reread the line because words were missing. Sorry, no interest in continuing reading.

Need an editor.