Yup.... loved it... read it to my girl and then fucked her face down while twisting her nipples and biting her neck. she thanks you
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Anonymous12/18/08
hot fuckin' story.
loved the details,liked the flow of this story.there are some minor distractors,but not enough to wreck the rhythm of this story for me.just tweak some of the sentences,but please continue on. good girl,fine job.
Your writing style is very distinctive. I really liked how the thoughts of both characters were interjected throughout the story. Very well written! :)
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Yup.... loved it... read it to my girl and then fucked her face down while twisting her nipples and biting her neck. she thanks you
hot fuckin' story.
loved the details,liked the flow of this story.there are some minor distractors,but not enough to wreck the rhythm of this story for me.just tweak some of the sentences,but please continue on. good girl,fine job.
:)
Your writing style is very distinctive. I really liked how the thoughts of both characters were interjected throughout the story. Very well written! :)
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