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Poor Kathy
Well, PostScriptor, I'm almost feeling sorry for
Kathy .. Not! LOL
This story is progressing very nicely .. keep
up the good work. Payback can be sweet ... ;)
why stop at clap?
Paul has taken virtually any and all possible psychological degradation and humiliation from Kathy and Karl. At this point, if they're so rotten and your so twisted and Machiavellian, why not go for HIV too? Polio? Leprosy? Common cold?
Diabolical
Your revenge may be over the top but is delicious in nature.
Boyd
ABSURD AND A JOKE
In chapter 7-9 the author states that Karl and Kathy wanted to get together to fuck but had ben interrupted several times.
Now she is a way on a trip to fuck karl???
so I guess I wasnt wrong after all?
whether she does or does actually fuck Karl in these chapters is MEANINGLESS.
There is nothing to save...The wife after THINKING her beloved Husband has had a near death experience (car
accident) ... was filled with remorse and guilt that she had been fucking Karl at the time of the accident... is STILL consumed by this need to fuck karl...
Its called over
Oh for the love of Pete!
Get over it already. All this time could have been spent divorcing her cheating ass and getting on with his life. He's like a fuckin' bitch with all this drama.
I just don't like the clap angle,
too over the top, to much of a chance of permenent damage. That would be to much to handle, when you're looking at your children, in that event.
Mercy?
Has the guy no mercy? Surely he does not intend to stay married to her? After this she will be a broken woman. Is that his intention? To totally destroy them? Vengeance is mine saith the cuckolded husband!
Okay, I Think I am in the Process
of changing my mind.
If you're going to do a true revenge on someone whom you gave everything and you found out is willing to not only fuck around on you but also ask that you accept it.... I think giving the lovers STD's is pretty goofily clever. Not death but just debilitating, excruciating pain.
Of course, he must be truly cold and calculated. And it IS very possible to make the husband to be that way: totally calculated and merciless, to both Karl and Kathy. Yes, have him shed some real tears, too, but have him also wipe his tears away, alone, and carry on, forge ahead, without looking back or second guessing himself.
I mean, there's no saving --- there's nothing worth saving --- in this story, at this juncture; so might as well allow the wimpy husband to have some middle school aged fun, to dull his pain for being cuckolded like that by someone he HAD truly loved.
If you're gonna go this route, then, again, go the whole way; make it really deviant and clever so that even those who have turned against the husband, if they're honest, can finish the story saying:
"Well, he's a complete dick and should be shot dead.... but, man, he's clever and calculated. I'd hate to cross that bastard!"
As an author who's shaping a character like YOU seem to be shaping Paul here, you should really go all the way; allow Paul to have fund, dark and deviant fun, to sooth his deeply wounded soul. And have him say to his audience/the world: "You may not like this, but you're not me. These two people fucked me over big time, and I am simply getting my pound of flesh. There's nothing personal about it! I have burnt all the bridges to THAT episode of my life, and I have moved on and I am fine now..."
If you, the author, could actually accomplish such a task, then I say, bravo!, even if I don't think Paul's a very nice man to cross.... Such a man, whether I like him or not, I have respect for him...
I agree with several arguments regarding this.
She had a vision when he was in the wreck and stopped the love making just to go back and have a big weekend? Giving her the clap is no big deal unless some other bug was in there with it. He can say he is burning and the doctor said she should come in and then diagnose her and have her treated, he can say she got it from Karl. It is taking to long to finalize, I like revenge and nothing is really to overboard except murder but it has to be timely. After he has agreed she could go out and fuck another with his knowledge there is in way once this is done she could ever go back and respect her husband. His accepting the fact is an act of submission she can use to belittle and humiliate him in the future saying she "loves" him but does not respect him. Only a seriously mentally ill person could live the life the wife is living and still claim to be completely in love with her husband. All of this screams out how much she totally wants to betray and disrespect her husband despite what she says. The line from her sister about how the guy could have sought her out years ago if he really loved her should have been used in the story. It immediately points out she isnt his love only his fuck meat. The nice picture of her with the black guys hasnt been used, I had assumed you would mysteriously email it to Karl when she stayed with her husband in the Washington episode and given him the thought she was fucking blacks that weekend instead of him. And I do agree with several comments that this is taking to long and some of your chapters are to slow. I realize you want each act to be its own section but you could put them in several chapters and submit more than one page each.
This is a great series
For those of you that enjoy the fact that some ass can waltz in and fuck up this guy's marriage, keep bitching. Remember this is about accountability. This story doesn't celebrate the wimpy husband stereotype. This series is great!
Yes! Love The Plot!!
I love the plot ,but agree The CLAP is going a little "overboard"- Permanent damage a possibility--Paul must have the patience of JOB - No way most husbands would even consider this arrangement ---Conclusion+++If she realises she's made a terrible error b 4 shit hits the fan -then let them work it out --If not dump her!!!
Interesting but over the top
As a story, this plot has been interesting in an comic book/B movie sort of way. As long as the reader checks his sense of reality at the door, it's intersting to watch the way that the author sets up his plot and brings it to fruition.
My only problem with the story comes when I try to think about it in real life terms. Frankly, by this point in the story I can't understand why the husband would even be willing to take Kathy back even if he did totally destroy Karl. You even refer to it in the last chapter. Why is she still being so selfish as to continue an affair despite her agreement with her sister that she is hurting Paul and risking loosing him every time she goes out?
As for the plan itself, I do have one comment. The plan seems to be to drive a wedge between Karl and Kathy by the loss of the jobs and by the Clap (I presume the picturew will come into play somewhere too). How does this type of plan help the husband? All it does is teach Kathy that this guy was a bastard. It doesn't touch her underlying selfishness. What happens when the next old "true love" comes along? All this plan seems to accomplish is to teach her that she had better "settle" for Paul.
One final technical point about posting. As you have learned, one lit page equals about 7 typed pages. A good length to post at when you are posting multiple chapter stories is 2-3 lit pages or between 15-20 pages typed. Shorter than that and you will receive complaints.
Good job! CCM
The story started low...
- and continues to descend...
The flawed premise that the best way to save your ego is by lowering yourself even lower than the worthless weasels that the mindless bimbo and her egotistic counterpart are is incredible! For heavens sake, previously the husband compares his “treasured” wife to the Nazis... So he goes on to sleep with the enemy, contaminate HIMSELF and WORSE his children with the toxic presence of a totally immature and narcissistic person while he makes things worse by modeling: lying lying lying as a way of life to the children...At some point in the future they will catch up and connect the dots...Regardless of what happens to the bimbo, this plan is sure to self destruct his relations with the children.
:-)
oh come on, give us a break, it really starts to remember me what I did in kindergarden as joke to harass the guys I did not like. well other than that fine with me.
Grow up People !!!!!!!
Do you "self centered, save the world, political correct" people understand how many people in the US has had VD in their liftime. I am sure that 40% of all military personel has had Clap at one time or another, with no Ill efects other that a burning penis and 300,000 units of penicillin. Grow up this isn't a fantasy world, It's the real world and if you had thought of the VD thing you would have been all for it. Those two deserve anything they git.Paul was a wimp but he is coming around.
Smoothly running Plan.... but????
There has to be a twist. It looks to me as if Paul is being destroyed by his own desire for revenge. I really do not think that with the amount of hate fueling his execution of the Plan, that he will be ever be able to love and trust another woman, much less Kathy, unless Karl does not get the clap! No that is ridiculous! This plan is too mechanical for a great story. But I keep reading because I enjoy it and there has to be some twists down the road.
This guy
is so devious and underhand, that (if he wasn't a fictional character) he would make a great politician(or are they fictional characters as well?)
THANK YOU!
I hated the ending to the original story so much that even I sat down and wrote another ending to it! It was purely theraputical and not for submission to the critics here who have a visseral responce to the stories in this catagory. But I am happy that you have chosen to supply us with a well written ending to a story that left men with a taste of dung in our mouths.
In responce to those who can't believe that Paul would actually want to put his marriage back together after his wife's latest actions (and I must admit I am doubtful myself), Parade Magazine just came out with their own survey this Sunday that stated 64% of respondents would want to work to restore their marriages if their partner had an affair.
W.T.F.
Is this something I could do, no I would be to hurt and pissed. Would I be dateing too, hell yes. Still a good read and fantasy, not sure if anything will be left of marriage when its all said and done, but thanks!
Good ol' nasty cheating wife fiction
It may be a little "over the top" but this IS fiction and I like it a lot. I gave it a 75 last time and 100 this time because it realistically falls somewhere in between.
a great read!
Keep going!!
great
iwas thinking of similar. for the bleeding hearts- all's fair in love, war and screwing up a marriage breaker. those who would stand by while their kids lives were destroyed (even if only temporarily) are the reasons that kind of crap happens. this crap was pretty rare before lawyers got control of our society, and that only for financial gain.
evil, but fiction.. AND Hilarious!
Yeah yeah.. man is too evil.. must be tormented and twisted to do this.. BUT! It is fiction... And who here would not think the same thing initially after finding out about a cheating spouse.. This is an awesome read!
He win s the award
Paul made it to super wimp in this installment. Here why: "To be honest, despite my knowing about things that were coming down, it still got me more angry that I could believe. I decided not to stick around to see her off to her lover." What it took months for Paul to finally show some backbone and instead he sulks away. Pathetic.
What's with some people?
This story has it all. Sex. Revenge. I'm just waiting for the the drink and drugs. Anyway carry on writing the story. If by this point people can't understand the what is happening in the story then there is no hope.
What the HELL!!
WHERE'S THE FINAL CHAPTER?????????
Great story and good writing but totally incomplete.
Please complete this story. You brag of being a postscriptor so be one. I would have given you a 5 (100) except for the lack of completion. Hubby was still a willing cuckold which destroyed my hopes for a successful ending. There were a few medical inaccuracies but overall very well done...with ONE GLARING EXCEPTION.
Now I know the author
Stated that Kathy was not to publicly embarrass or cuckold hubby. That was to be her agreement in continuing.I am highly suspicious that the author is going to renege on that arrangement. Because if he does not....Tuesday hubby SHOULD be filing for divorce based on the reason Kathy is fired for cause.
Cum filled Kathy....
...Should be chained in the basement long enough to let the STD to work its way into her brain...
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