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by lorencino09/19/08

Pissed off is good!

I like your attitude.
I like the fact that you are writing poetry on this topic.
I hope you don't stop writing poetry on this topic.

It needs a lot of work though, but it is a lot easier to develop an understanding of the forces that you unleash with technique in poetry than it is to understand the forces that create the dynamics of our society. We need to come to grips with the nature of our society but our understanding is marred by the persuasion industry (PI). The role of the political poet (or the social poet) is to draw back the minds of her readers from the clutches of the PI and repair the damage to critical thinking that our failed education system has neglected to deal with in it's no-one-left-behind fiasco.

It is worth attending to the effectiveness of your poetic technique in order to convey more effectively these things that are in such urgent need of saying.

What the world needs now . . . is . . . :
Useans pissed of with the lies they have been fed for over a century.

Don't stop writing if you really are pissed off.

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rough and damn fine

I see this more as an essay than a poem; I'd be hard pressed to critique it as the latter. But as a piece of writing it's damn fine, and absolutely worthwhile. You have a distinct voice, and a real skill. Keep up the good work.

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