by Roadbug
and was pleased to see the latest addition to this tale. Please, continue.
I can't wait for the next chapter. PLease hurry, not that i am rushing you but i can't wait.
Hope you are just taking a short break, and will soon continue this story.
HOT DAMN,u have to write more Roadbug.I have read alot of stories like this and I can truthfully say ur's is one of the best,I mean u really REALLY HAVE to write more.
you definitely have skill with words. i was hooked through all 4 chapters so far, please continue this story. and continue to write.
i have read these four chapters of your story many times now and still never tire of it, awesome work please continue it!!!
This is a great story please continue it is would be a shame to let the story die
very good (not rearly a fitting comment but i would love to read more)
you should think about trying a publisher with this
This is a really good story! You have real talent. I hope you will continue the story!
thats a good story im interested in reading more though the last few paragraphs made it seem like the lady of the forest was playing them and had taken a mortal coil as gods sometimes do
You have a defined talent, and it would be unkind at best to not finish this story out. You've created a yearning, a hunger in your readers to know the end, and beyond. Please finish it. Thank you.
This has been a great story so far, and has the potential to become an even greater series. Please consider answering the pleas of you readers and continue with the series.
just re-read the first 4 parts of your story for the umpteenth time, and still love it. please dont leave it unfinished, it really is worth completing!
Please continue I desperately want to know how it continues. Does the sword (the really ancient one) have a spirit type essence that just moved on the the daughter? Does the daughter now know how to use a sword in it's fullness thanks to the blue light? Is Bear (the enemy champion from ch. 00 ) join the group? So many questions left hanging!
Great start.. leaves you wanting for more!
Only thing I can suggest is to have an editor to edit your story. (the consistent use of words like except instead of accept, and a few others which were annoying) This doesn't detract too much from my enjoyment in reading your story though.
I could not agree more with the other comments, great story, can't wait for the next installment
This story is wonderful and had so much promise. However, since there hasn't been a new chapter in almost five years, I'm guessing we will never get to see where this adventure could have gone.... so sad!
The writing is very prolix and considering the predictable action perhaps a sort of harem is not a very appropriate choice but i think remain nice the same so i'm curious to read the next chapters.
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I'm glad that until now you have avoided adding sexual parts to concentrate on the story, if in the future you will put some of them, I hope will be well developed without forcing it on the story.
a fine tale you are weaving which has possibilities of great expanse.
I offer this bit of advice--read your work backwards at least once. It will help you find better words and awkward usages
In working your craft, forget not Simon, he can have a great role to play
Interesting, but stilted. The dialogue comes across as odd and uncomfortable. The scenes are poorly described.
Lots of potential and looking forward to seeing what happens.
Roadbug has earned a name just as did those in this story. His name should be master of the unfinished story!!! I loved the story even with it's spelling and grammatical faults, but it is just downright cruel to start such compelling stories and then let them just come to a screeching halt leaving his readers hanging.
I have now learned after reading this to always go to the last page of the last chapter of all stories I read. Too see if there are any comments stating that it is an unfinished story. So I know not to bother reading them.