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Stupid
Stupid story about stupid couple, I don't care what happens and won't read any more. The only one in story worth a shit is black bouncer so that tells me where this is going, no thanks.
Okay.
The journey is complete. You have turned a story about a loving couple in to a cluster fuck. The wife will never be satisfied with husband anymore and husband will not be satisfied with 'normal' sex. He will always want to watch and she will always want to flirt and fuck other men and women. The marriage will not last any longer than the time 'Randy' chooses to kill it. In stories readers at least have to like one person in that story. There isn't one likeable person in this story at all. The wife is so weak she gives women a bad name, the husband is a wimp who has no balls and gives men a bad name and all the other people in the story are either total bastards or whores. So not much of a story really. I wouldn't mind so much but the sex scenes are not that erotic either.
Decision Made!
Again -A great plot that let me down --Why ask readers for thier opinions if you don't listen?--You need to find a new theme --You've just about ruined the kick you're on now__" The sick husband you want to see with another man -every one of your stories have this theme !-Sad part of this -is you never completely finish the story!--in this case why on earth would wife agree to a football game with Randy after what happened with her date with Dick and Mona -Are you sick -or ill?---You'd far better off with finishing "Second Thoughts" than wasting your time with this type of sick story!-I think readers have had just about enough of this bullshit!
It's time for Jen to get fucked
I would like for Tyrone to fuck Jen and turn her into a real slut. Let Tyrone show Jen what she has been missing with the wimp husband that she has. Michael has been wanting to be a cuckold husband, so turn him into a creampie eating submissive to his wife. It seems that he likes to masturbate more than fuck, so make that his only outlet for his sexual needs, and let Jen fuck everyone that she wants......Rich
please stop
it startet interesting and now its just patchwork. you should finish a story before posting first chapter.
Must be the "bonnietaylor influence"...
Interesting story to start but the "BT" affect kicked in and totally screwed up the story. Please quit!
okay
The suspense getting up to the sex is getting a little long. It is time for this wife to get screwed royally
Walking that line....
My comments are about the series overall (so far-haven't read past 8):
UP TO THIS POINT, this story is a nice experiment, and leads me to think that Xleglover (along with Goodhusband and BonnieTaylor) may have what it takes to take cuckold stories to a new level.
Jen is a great character, struggling against the different ways guys push women, but also struggling against her own desires to break out sexually. So the question is: Will Xleglover allow her to grow strong, to be a chooser, or will he do what so many cuckold writers do, and turn cuckold wives into passive “cum dumps” ?
-Michael is like a lot of married guys who are so in love with what turns them on, that they forget that they are with a real person. In a great cuckold story, Michael will get what he wants, but it will be both a curse and a blessing! ( The more it is a curse, the more we are turned on!)
-The way Randy stays in the background, quietly watching and planning, for the first episodes was a very nice touch-especially making a nice contrast with the complete asshole Bill. But is he all bad guy? How will he manipulate things to make a hook-up with Jen happen?
-And just when we think we know where the story would go, we are introduced to Tyrone-the only person who isn’t trying to use Jen.
If it were up to me, I would say: No more main characters! There is enough for some powerful sex scenes already.
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