I liked it. Nice detail and nice build-up to the sex. Very good for a first effort. You'll get better but you're off to a great start. Keep going. I can't defintely say there's anything 'wrong' with your style or technique, IMO, but writing is like that. Focus, economy of words and that extra vivid element come with practice.
Tell us about Suz....
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Anonymous09/27/08
Your Aunt was 'smart',
telling your folks to just let you 'sleep' so that you & she could do anything you wanted after you woke up. Why do I have the feeling that she is just as horny as you are?
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Anonymous09/28/08
Is this a repost?
This reads like a GeorgeIV story. I've read it before.
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Anonymous09/28/08
keep it up
had first real fantasiues about my two aunts; works well for me
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Anonymous10/12/08
>>
Loved the first part of your story
I'd love to see how the story unfolds.
Don't leave us hanging..
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Anonymous01/29/12
Nice
i see someones an old-school Anime Fan as i am...anyway..i enjoyed the build up & kinda hoped they'd done something when he woke up but thats part of development i guess..nice work
English
Good effort
I liked it. Nice detail and nice build-up to the sex. Very good for a first effort. You'll get better but you're off to a great start. Keep going. I can't defintely say there's anything 'wrong' with your style or technique, IMO, but writing is like that. Focus, economy of words and that extra vivid element come with practice.
Tell us about Suz....
Your Aunt was 'smart',
telling your folks to just let you 'sleep' so that you & she could do anything you wanted after you woke up. Why do I have the feeling that she is just as horny as you are?
Is this a repost?
This reads like a GeorgeIV story. I've read it before.
keep it up
had first real fantasiues about my two aunts; works well for me
>>
Loved the first part of your story
I'd love to see how the story unfolds.
Don't leave us hanging..
Nice
i see someones an old-school Anime Fan as i am...anyway..i enjoyed the build up & kinda hoped they'd done something when he woke up but thats part of development i guess..nice work
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