All Comments on 'Lost Bet'

Decent story but would be above average with an editor. It also seemed rushed.

The makings of a good story, but as the other guy says a little too rushed

Dude, you really need an editor. Could've been a good story but the run on sentences and misspelled words was way too distracting to me.

alittle short not much build up may be part two will be better

This was pathetic. Learn to write or get an editor to help you.

...short and direct...now get some black stallions involved!!!...HOT!!!

You need to put quotations " this" for when someone is talking. And you need to spell check.

I wish I was tim

like that, specially the cabin scene.