All Comments on 'Magic'

by Morghaine

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AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Nice!

Nice! Very poetic.

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Well

I guess he was a good fuck.

cinnamon_kisses12cinnamon_kisses12over 15 years ago
wow

That was quite deep!

yaziquexyaziquexover 15 years ago
You're skillful

Amazing use of language,

so sensual - I'll show this to my girlfriend.

Really, this is prime quality writing.

The way you stopped it before an more intimate penetration is so teasing, and makes the imagination wonder...

If you want criticism:

(I'm a guy)

Sometimes while reading it wasn't sure what was happening - but maybe that's intentional (the bewilderment of that women).

Also though: that dragon metaphor (which is really cool) maybe didn't need to be repeated so often.

I loved how you used the word damp, along with a whole heap of other stuff. Too many people say wet/moist/juicy.

You're good!!

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