All Comments on 'Hotel Room'

I liked it, but it felt a bit too easy. He plays with her nipples a lil bit and she (involuntarily? uncontrollably?) pushes her chest up towards him. I'm all for forced orgasms in noncon fiction, but it just seemed a bit too easy.

Also: "He ripped her apart, holding her legs high up in the air". Is this anal? If it is anal what is with the referral to pressing against her womb? Well, if it is anal, you should write it. If it isn't anal, what is with the ripping? She isn't a virgin and she is wet at that point.

In spite of this nit pick, did like it, just think you could make it better.

As for the quick arousal - it's a phantasy =)

As for the ripping, you can be wet and aroused and still be so tight that it hurts when someone forcefully enters.