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by WickedEve10/08/08

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I agree with what you wrote, but you're not really saying anything that will stay with me. You are telling me things. Not showing me, as a reader, anything. Give me some details, descriptions. Why do we detest teens? Why are children the future? Tell me in your own words; show me. I read a few of your other poems. Stolen was a good poem. It told me more of a story and it will stay with me for awhile. So, I know you can offer the reader more. I do thank you for sharing your poetry.

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