Arch Enemies Ch. 02

MORE!!

MORE PLEASE!!! :)

Slow

At this rate this story will take forever.

Love it!!!

keep on going!!! I crave the next entry. I also like your writing skill. I can't wait!!!!

Love a great build up!

but happy that you hope to lengthen the chapters more. They are way too short and this is a great story so it's the worst tease I've had in a while! LOL. You are doing a great job story-wise and the characters are awesome! Cannot wait for more! (and soon hopefully)!!!

Goodness

Am I the only one who thought that this chapter was so overwhelmingly sweet? Hmmm. Must be. Brady's such a nice guy under all that animosity. I really can't wait for the heat in both of them to explode :P But I'm enjoying the wait(:

I like it alot so far...

I really do it kinda made me sad to know he had went out and bought her new books and she didn't know it.. I love how it's going so far you are doing a great job of it so don't you dare stop now.. hope to read more of you soon..

Write it as you see fit.

If the chapters are small, that's fine. Don't force it -- then you'll never be able to write anything. Besides, smaller chapters might get posted faster, and you know how impatient people can be for a good story! :)

good start

This is a good start. (I just caught both the opening chapters.) Stop apologizing! Your writing is just fine.
-- KK in Texas

I'm impressed...

But could you try to make the chapters a bit longer? Write until you hit like page 15 of Word, then upload. It makes for better reading and it keeps your readers coming back. Dont force the writing, but don't tease too much with these tiny chapters. Any way, I will be reading though!

Amazing

Keep up the good work!

Longer chapters please!!!!!!!!!

I agree that you should write as you see fit but I think you should give us a bit more than a couple of paragraphs. Its a fantastic start though and I'm looking forward to the next LONGER instalment!

I like your writing, but thats a long paragraph

not a short chapter. I also thought it was a bit unlikely that they both just decided to buy her books but I suppose its possible. I gave this a 4 as its just too short but for what its worth I do like your writing all my quibbles are minor ones. Thanks. -- UK CYNIC.

Fuking awesome!!

Great!!!

Short and sweet!!!

AAHRG!

You've NO idea how badly I wish I could have HIT him!

I love the story so far, but I swear, if he keeps up with this douchebaggery in the next chapters I'm bracing myself to read, I WILL find you, my dear little author, and torture you.