nice story... just a bit skimpy on the sex for my taste... all allure and not much wooarr!...well written though... well done
A little confusing, I think it could have used more background and descriptions, but not bad otherwise. Good luck in the contest.
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nice story
nice story... just a bit skimpy on the sex for my taste... all allure and not much wooarr!...well written though... well done
Not a bad effort!
A little confusing, I think it could have used more background and descriptions, but not bad otherwise. Good luck in the contest.
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