Great story... well-written... one of the best on this site... thanks for sharing.
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Anonymous10/18/08
Nothing fake
Amazing , one of the few stories that I actally believed to have really happened . You told it simply without any exageration and as an older person I could feel your emotions . Do write more like this .
by
Anonymous10/18/08
follow up story?
HELLO,
love your story, and i hope there will
be a follow up story. you have a way
with words that make it sound exciting!
good luck.
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Anonymous10/18/08
Entertaining, but...
I know I'll get flamed for this, and I don't care; but what the hell is wrong with picking a tense and staying with it? Past tense, no, present, no, no, past... I got dizzy.Also, what's up with the unquoted dialog?All I'm talking about is attention to writing English. Is that so much to ask?
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Anonymous10/19/08
LMAO
I loved the ending. That was kind of cute. I do think there should be a sequel or something. Maybe Diane comes back or something.
I was beginning to wonder, but then the condom issue came up. It was handled beautifully and your "blanks" status certainly added the needed eroticism to the story. She must have been very horny after that revelation! Now she can fuck her new boyfriend and still fuck you without her being afraid of getting pregnant by a side benefit of your cock once in awhile.
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Anonymous07/20/10
when are going to write the follow up to this story?
it has been 2 years since you wrote this. when are you
going to finish the story?
English
Excellent
Great story... well-written... one of the best on this site... thanks for sharing.
Nothing fake
Amazing , one of the few stories that I actally believed to have really happened . You told it simply without any exageration and as an older person I could feel your emotions . Do write more like this .
follow up story?
HELLO,
love your story, and i hope there will
be a follow up story. you have a way
with words that make it sound exciting!
good luck.
Entertaining, but...
I know I'll get flamed for this, and I don't care; but what the hell is wrong with picking a tense and staying with it? Past tense, no, present, no, no, past... I got dizzy.Also, what's up with the unquoted dialog?All I'm talking about is attention to writing English. Is that so much to ask?
LMAO
I loved the ending. That was kind of cute. I do think there should be a sequel or something. Maybe Diane comes back or something.
Very nice story,
and so sweet. It all seemed so plausible. Of course I loved the neat ending, which opens the door for another great story. Thanks.
the making of another story
that was a great story, and perhaps
you will write a follow up story.
please do.
xxxxxx
I loved it!
I was beginning to wonder, but then the condom issue came up. It was handled beautifully and your "blanks" status certainly added the needed eroticism to the story. She must have been very horny after that revelation! Now she can fuck her new boyfriend and still fuck you without her being afraid of getting pregnant by a side benefit of your cock once in awhile.
when are going to write the follow up to this story?
it has been 2 years since you wrote this. when are you
going to finish the story?
Nice
Love the build up to an erotic coupling or three. Then you go and introduce a cheerleader. wow
Hope you plan to continue this as a series.
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