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i feel like you're starting to drag the story! and erin is retarted! but i still want to keep reading!!!
BLEH
Ignore the idiots. Telling us about their past adds much to character development. I think I can see why they 'hate' each other so much now; looks like they were REALLY close. Hmmm. Looking forward to more!
What the fricking frack?
Um...she can't be that stupid, can she? He almost raped you!! So what he apologized, so what you were drunk, HE WOULD HAVE GANG RAPED YOU! Ditz! Please let her see reason or please think this through a bit more.
What the FREAKING HECK MAN
I love this story and all and I know that you said to give you some time to build up the story. but you just leave us with bits and peices We're at the 4th chapter and it was just a taste of what you've got and it's KILLING MEEE!!!!!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE make the chapters longer!!!!! PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSEEEEE
I dont care it it drags a bit but...
these chapters have to be longer. I'm all for stories that take it nice & easy, building up to something majorly emotional & physical but I'd like to read for a bit in each chapter first. It's just that when I just start getting into whats going on.....it's finished already. I think when a story is as good as the one you're writing that the reader gets a bit frustrated with drips and drabs. Personally I am really LOVING this story and these characters but when I feel that way about a story....I always want MORE, lol. I think you are doing an INCREDIBLE job with this story and you are VERY talented. The only thing I suggest it making these chaps at least 2 pages each. You can still make it a long series (it thats wha you are looking to do) but they need to be longer. Cant wait for the next part! Thank you for sharing with us!
She can't be that stupid can she??????????????????
I have been loving this story since you started but I have 2 points of beef with you instead of 1.
1)As always pls make the chapters longer - you could have combined chapters 1-2 and 3-4 for 2 chapters.
2) For a smart girl, Erin just made a fantastically stupid decision that I can't understand...was it to spite Brady? Or is she just a moron? Please rectify in the next submission cos I thought it was a fantastic story until i read today's submission
A friend told me to get on here and read this...
I'm glad I did because it's really good! I agree though that longer chapters would be so much better. I would also love to see maybe how things are affecting Brady emotionally and physically through *his eyes* in this story. I would love to see exactly what's going on in that head of his so maybe do some writing from his point of view on things too? In any case, I'm really loving this story and your writing! Can't wait for the next part!
Let's not forget....
...that Brady wasn't exactly a perfect gentleman when he dropped Erin off. Don't forget, they're all just confused, and acting stupid, probably like a lot of us did in high school.
Love it!
I like it! This is a good story! Please more and soon! Thanks!!
waiting...
i am waiting for your next installment. though i haven't been commenting on each ch., i have been marking it a 5. thanks for the quick update btw, but i do hope she sees the light soon (like even if she did lead them on she was still harassed). i don't mind them not seeing eye to eye for a chapter or another, but i beg you not to make her dumb, because if you do i would think she's really not worth Brady's time.
She's an idiot.
How can she rationalize what Jeffrey did to her? And how can she forgive him. What's it going to take before she sees the truth? Will she actually have to be gang-raped before she stays away from him? I agree with the others who said longer chapters and more details about what Brady is thinking and feeling. It would be better to take longer between posts and have meatier chapters.
whoa
im just luvin it
LOVED IT
keep doing what your doing the story is great :D
More!
She's stupid! Jeffrey is clearly lying. Can't wait for more.
hmm
well...to be truthful i'm a bit disappointed with this chapter! I thought Erin was a smart girl with enough belief in her own judgement..
Great!
I can't wait for thenext chapter!
Hitting your stride now,
last 2 ch. are both 5s. I take it Billy is the older brother, should be good. Thanks. -- UK CYNIC.
Hitting your stride now,
last 2 ch. are both 5s. I take it Billy is the older brother, should be good. Thanks. -- UK CYNIC.
Knight???
He was Brandy King... how the hell did he become Brandy Knight?
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