Very bad, if this is your first time then you need some work. You mixed up the names of the characters several times calling the dad Mark then Peter then introducing a Peter then mistaking the son jeremy with Peter's name. Keep track of all the names while writing.
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Anonymous11/01/08
Duplicate Submission
Read earlier your submission entitled "The Adulteress" which is the same story. What gives? Did you try to edit/change to second entry? If so, you failed miserably.
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Anonymous04/19/11
Stupid Kid?
Feel sorry for the poor sap, if she cheated once she will cheat again. Once they get that thrill of the sneaking around it will eat at her till she does it again and i doubt if they hadn't got caught that it would have only happened once either.
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Anonymous11/11/13
just another fuck slut whore
but at least it showed her hubby had been lusting after the other woman as it didn't take long for them to shack up but then she got her son - like they say - vice is nice but incest is best.....but I thought she was pregnant to the other guy perhaps it was a false alarm and the son got his sperm in first....so it should be....
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too confusing
Very bad, if this is your first time then you need some work. You mixed up the names of the characters several times calling the dad Mark then Peter then introducing a Peter then mistaking the son jeremy with Peter's name. Keep track of all the names while writing.
Duplicate Submission
Read earlier your submission entitled "The Adulteress" which is the same story. What gives? Did you try to edit/change to second entry? If so, you failed miserably.
Stupid Kid?
Feel sorry for the poor sap, if she cheated once she will cheat again. Once they get that thrill of the sneaking around it will eat at her till she does it again and i doubt if they hadn't got caught that it would have only happened once either.
just another fuck slut whore
but at least it showed her hubby had been lusting after the other woman as it didn't take long for them to shack up but then she got her son - like they say - vice is nice but incest is best.....but I thought she was pregnant to the other guy perhaps it was a false alarm and the son got his sperm in first....so it should be....
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