but this was terrible. why was it in the romance section?
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Anonymous11/04/08
not bad
This is okay but it kind of leaves you hanging. It's hard to get too involved with the characters when there's no name and no history, either for the characters or between them. I read your other story (Not a Typical Friday Night) and I think it shares the same problems. Also, I guess for a romance, neither is very romantic, at least in the sense that the women are sort of used... again, if there were more back story, that might not be the case.
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Anonymous11/04/08
Romance?
This is the 2nd 'Romance' story today that boils down to 'Erotic Coupling.' If you dont know the name of the guy you are fucking, and it ends right after the sex, then its not Romance. Romance implies love and contiuation, not just a chick and a nameless cock.
Thank you all for your feedback. This was written about the guy I lost my virginity to after we broke up. I knew the backstory but did not include it in here—so you would have no way of knowing it. I will revise this and resubmit it. Thank you so much!!!!
English
not to be negative...
but this was terrible. why was it in the romance section?
not bad
This is okay but it kind of leaves you hanging. It's hard to get too involved with the characters when there's no name and no history, either for the characters or between them. I read your other story (Not a Typical Friday Night) and I think it shares the same problems. Also, I guess for a romance, neither is very romantic, at least in the sense that the women are sort of used... again, if there were more back story, that might not be the case.
Romance?
This is the 2nd 'Romance' story today that boils down to 'Erotic Coupling.' If you dont know the name of the guy you are fucking, and it ends right after the sex, then its not Romance. Romance implies love and contiuation, not just a chick and a nameless cock.
Thank you
Thank you all for your feedback. This was written about the guy I lost my virginity to after we broke up. I knew the backstory but did not include it in here—so you would have no way of knowing it. I will revise this and resubmit it. Thank you so much!!!!
Not romance
Although you are on the right website you didn't put your story on the right section.... it was not romance... it was good but it doesn't go here...
great beginnig
it was good but kind of confusing, why would he break up with her then follow her? i hope you keep writing and answer this in the story.
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