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Yessss!
This was so good and HOT! My goodness. Makes me wish I knew a little Jap. Oh well. God, these two can make me squirm. Wish they get to know each other better before they REALLY fall in love, though. That would be awesome. Maybe some outdoor fun? Or a planned trip with just the two of 'em? Just thoughts. Drop a mail if you need any help and keep up with the good work(:
Erotic and Well Done.
Both Chapters have been very well written and hot. Which you really don't get all that often on Literotica. Sure you get a lot of hot stories but not always good ones. You have a nice balance of substance and eroticism. I would continue with the story line, with a step by step with their seduction of each other, as you've done so far.
very very hot
very very hot
looking foward to more
yaoi
its quite apparent that you have read yaoi manga or yaoi novels. But, of all the original stories I love the smooth flow of yours, i mean its not all over the place. Good job! Keep writing.
yaoish indeed
but all's well since i'm a yaoi otaku as well...
hehe... i'm about to fall off my seat.
Love it!
Very hot! Under the tablecloth - well done.
Sweet too, with the love tones.
Hottttt!!!!!
I just love it!!!!
Love the yaoi. Wish the chapters were longer.
LOL!!
That was funny! XD LOVE this story! :3
wtf is a restauranté?! please, just use one of the thousand free dictionaries available online instead of making up words. ta
ps : it's actually "ristorante italiano"
cool story
It had some strong moments but some parts of the dialogue felt linear and rushed, so you could get to that "perfect" ending, and frankly a story with so much depth and color should focus more on the dark and grity side of the history of the characters a bit more.... All and all, I wish you made the story longer because then it would have been a perfect 5 stars. There were details that you missed that are killing me to know about the characters. I gave it 4 stars though. I really liked this!!!!
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