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by Anonymous

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by 11/03/08

Nice Metaphor

This poem is mentioned in today's New Poem Review in the Poetry Feedback & Discussion forum. Thanks for the read.

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by WickedEve11/04/08

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This is really good. The first stanza is great. I'd tightened up the rest of the poem, though. Maybe delete some of these lines: Show it off to you/I won’t let it shatter/It goes crooked/Rattles from an outside force/I move it from wall to wall

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