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Nice...
Very interested to see where this is going to go from here. Also, maybe just make it a bit longer too next time?
Great start!
Terrific beginning. Looking forward to seeing what the secret is and I agree would like the chapters to be a little longer.
Oh, wow......
As beginning chapters go (okay, a bit short on detail!), this story has massive promise. Hit us with more, as soon as you can.
-- KK in Texas
YOU TERRIBLE TERRIBLE PERSON.........
I HATE CLIFF HANGERS!!!!! LEAVES ME HUNGRY FOR MORE!!!! PLEASE HURRY.
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I'm sorry, I'd already submitted chapter two before reading your comments. I will make chapter three longer. Thanks for your feedback.
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