This story has a great deal of potential to become a good series, but this first offering is far too short and feels rushed. The very title gives away the secret, so leaving it as a "twist" for another chapter seems pointless. But, again, it has potential, and I'm interested in seeing what happens with future chapters.
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Anonymous11/17/08
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God, what were you thinking, posting that inane whatever it is on here????
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Anonymous11/17/08
has potential
There you could be a father again and your wife a grandma
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Anonymous11/17/08
Boring !!!
Extremely boring - why bother writing it ?
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Anonymous11/18/08
Chance
Give it a chance. Good start, but it was a bit short. Ignore all the 'know alls' carry on and don't rush it. Theres loads of scope for this story.
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Potential
This story has a great deal of potential to become a good series, but this first offering is far too short and feels rushed. The very title gives away the secret, so leaving it as a "twist" for another chapter seems pointless. But, again, it has potential, and I'm interested in seeing what happens with future chapters.
ZZZ....ZZZ....ZZZZZZZZ
God, what were you thinking, posting that inane whatever it is on here????
has potential
There you could be a father again and your wife a grandma
Boring !!!
Extremely boring - why bother writing it ?
Chance
Give it a chance. Good start, but it was a bit short. Ignore all the 'know alls' carry on and don't rush it. Theres loads of scope for this story.
Potential
It ha spotential. I don't mind the quickness of the story, there's always room for a quickie ;)
Should have renamed it though, there's ne suspense when the title gives it all away :/
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