by lillianlovelady
Great start, I really enjoyed reading it. This story needs to be continued, please do so.
would have been much better with out the orgies and lies almost bad enough for the group or fetish area
I think the beginning of the story is perfect. You've created some wonderful characters and set up a very vivid situation. Well done.
My only criticism is that it seems that when you start talking about the sibling attraction it becomes slightly more base than the rest of the text. Regardless, you write beautifully and should certainly continue. Good job.
I think the beginning of the story is perfect. You've created some wonderful characters and set up a very vivid situation. Well done.
My only criticism is that it seems that when you start talking about the sibling attraction it becomes slightly more base than the rest of the text. Regardless, you write beautifully and should certainly continue. Good job.
Don't listen to the critics! This is great, a Wonderful Fantasy! Please write more!
What?! Where's the rest??? Damn, you left me high and dry.
Well, actually high and wet, but yeah..
Please update it was getting so good why stop there? You had my going I was getting good and wet...💦