The title says it all.
I think you have it in you to tell a good tale. Don't get discouraged. Do keep writing!
that this story totally excites me!!
Nice premise but poor execution. A lot of grammar mistakes and the dialogue didn't fit the scene. Try an editor because you do have promise.
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Waste Of A Good Read
The title says it all.
It Wasn't Great....But
I think you have it in you to tell a good tale. Don't get discouraged. Do keep writing!
is it wrong??
that this story totally excites me!!
Poor execution
Nice premise but poor execution. A lot of grammar mistakes and the dialogue didn't fit the scene. Try an editor because you do have promise.
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Jorden's Daughter or
More submissions by Ravenara.