Dance with the Devil

Keep going!

I'm excited to see where this will go!

great start

can't wait for more !

very nice....

This should be a series where other mobs take darien away from the Devil n he has to go through hell n back to get her. But of course this all happens after they get together.

erm

i think it's moving too fast.. but it could be interesting...

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great

okay heres a real comment!lol
great start. you write well and the story has a real smooth flow. i can't wait to read some more. please keep up the good work!

Keep up the good work, one page in and I am dying to see how the story continues!

Sweep

A clean sweep by the enemy1

Too ambiguous

The tag "interracial" is an ambiguous term. It could mean Black Male, White Female or White Male Black Female, or others, such as Asian.

I skimmed through this first chapter in order to establish which element of "interracial" this was, but failed to discover so

Also, I didn't like the names of the characters. I prefer names like Thomas and Christine, that way you know straight away whether it's a boy or a girl

A nice msg

Umm how about you do you Peachyrome. Hell if someone doesn't like the way you write or, ( the laughable ) the way you name the people in the story tough shit!!!!!... You keep doing you and remember not everyone is going to like what you write or shall I even say do in life. As long as you're writting from a true place they just keep em' coming.

No Way!

I refuse to believe that anyone in their right mind would complain about the main characters names. It has to be a joke!!!!!!!!!!

I enjoyed chapter 1 very much!

Creative

I actually like the names and like the creative twist. There are so many different types of names on the planet. It is refreshing to get something other than Ken and Barbie or Dick and Jane names.

Msg

The ability to add a comment allows the reader to comment on the stories they're reading and to make comments - negative or positive. If those posting comments don't like the comments made by others, tough shit.

Daaaaaamn!

Can I write it again??
Daaaaaamn!!!!! Lol.

I hope she doesn't give in too easily to this guy. He seems like the stereotypical underworld mafia boss. Modern-day Tony Soprano with a 'thing' for Black women.

Wonder if those guys really exist (?). [Sigh].

soular?

sounds like a story by soular but lacking the correct grammar.