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Terrific story!
I can't wait to read more. Would like to have longer chapters. Please hurry and post the next chapter soon.
Really Loving This...
but the chapters are way, way too short. Don't know about other readers but I like at least 2 pages minimum in each chapter. I just found this story and went back to read the first 2 chaps before this one. The story and characters are great! Love your writing too, but agree with the other poster about changing 'scenes'. I was confused for a second and had to reread the line twice to realise that we were onto another 'scene'. Many writers on here separate those scene changes with something like- ~~~~~~~ or ***********.
In any case I think you are doing a brilliant job and this I can see is going to be another fav story of mine on here. Cannot wait for the next part!
Love it - more please
I also agree that longer chapters would be better. So far, though, it is excellent. Looking forward to the next installment.
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