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Hot MILF Slut!
After he leaves, she should go naked to the window and call Jimmy in for some more hot fun!
Sexy but needs editing
Better in third person.
Good story
The Wife Tammy series is really good, with some great sex scenes and it does a good job of showing her transformation. The story works much better in third person, though, as the later parts illustrate.
I have to agree with the comment about editing
POV and first or third person seem to float a lot. Sounds nit picky but anything that pulls the reader away from the image he or she is forming in his head is bad.
It is too much work to write a story and damage it with this kind of error.
Sounds like there are some good stories in that head.
Thank you.
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