All Comments on 'Two's a Crowd Ch. 06'

This has gone from interesting, to cliche, and now on to just plain silly. It has a lot of potential, but the MPD damaged and since then is truly killing it. The man, as your characters so often do, is now bordering on pathetic; and the woman has her excuses, reasons, and outs, as your characters so often do. Such technical talent and imagination, such promise....always taken down by such poor plots. Still I must give it at least a 50, because you do write so well. Michael

But you make it difficult. Women blaming the man (eventhough your "Hero" isn't much of a man. Damn fool cries at the drop of a hat). How original for you.

You are very good angiquesophie

I like the twist of multiple personalities. There is a reason for every action and reaction. I know an individual that suffers with MPD.

male species [just like every other story this author has drafted]. As predicted, from this 'man-hater's POV", it is forever the male's fault for this slut wife's problems. OMG, perhaps this happened to the author in real life? LOL

DOES HE FINDER HER? I LIKE TO READ MORE AND SEE HOW IT ENDS.

I find this story very interesting so far. It has many of the strengths and weakness of angiquesophie's other stories, such as good writing and characters blaming the man for women's woes.

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That latter tendency is a bit hard to take in this installment. Giving the benefit of the doubt though, I'm thinking that maybe the mother is blaming him as a form of shock psychology. Basically, forcing him to realize that continuing to act as he does will only make the situation worse (even though he's justified in feeling and acting that way). If that's what she's trying to do, then I can understand and applaud this chapter.

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However, that said, the mother is also greatly to blame. Why didn't see ever tell him about Estelle before?! At the very least, once he learned of the dual personalities, she should have filled him in on the rest, such as the years of therapy, and thus given him a chance to cope. As it was, he's getting blindsided over and over. Not surprisingly, he's lashing out in confusion. Anyone else would, in his shoes.

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I blame the mother for Miriam's decent since her divorce much more than the husband.

I understand your need to maintain continuity. Your say Myriam has MPD when clearly she does not. And you have to continue in that vain. It is destroying what was a very good story up until it's introduction. Please explain how a consensual act at the hotel in Dallas can kill Myriam days later when she confronts Bruce in New York. Again that is not how MPD works. If you are going to use a mental illness please research it first. This is like all those stories with marriage counselors in them. Where the author always gets it wrong. And now that Bruce knows everything why is trying to find a slut that fucked everyone he knew throughout their marriage? Myriam had the veto power but never used it. That makes her complicit. So again she has become a common slut. Estelle should only exert herself at moments of high stress and yet she seems to come and go whenever the slut Myriam needs an excuse. Normally "Loving Wives" stories are train wrecks because of the situation of infidelity. This story is becoming a train wreck do to the author's ignorance of a complex psychological disorder. If I were you I would go back to chapter three and start a rewrite. As one of your other commentators has already stated, the story must be believable even if it is fantasy. The mother knows of Myriam's so called condition and never tells Bruce? What kind of monster is she? IF Myriam had been to therapy, the doctor would have included the mother do to the patient's age. Her mother would have been inform of all the pitfalls involved in her daughter ever having a normal life. And then there are the Meds. Myriam would be taking multiple medications that would not be voluntary again do to her age. None of this is in your story and none of it can be hid from the light of day. Please clean this story up. It has gone from one of your best to your worse. Very Disappointing.

Bruce started on a journey to find Myriam, only to realize that she never existed in the first place.Estelle was the true woman and Myriam was the escape valve for when life needed to calm down. Now that Estelle has finally realized she doesn't Myriam, that part of her life is finished. At least that's my opinion. Good story and well written. Thanks....Rich

Split personlity, control of the mind, fighting the inner urges ... not everybody can believe this. But it's a strong story. Don't know what to make of it even if I try to imagine how I would react in such situation. All I feel at this moment is that Bruce is on his way to self destruction if he isn't able to let go of the connection he has with Myriam who never really was there for him, to let go of the "love" he felt for an "imaginary" person who only existed for short periods of time. Again, a strong story in my opinion. G.Belgium.

As long as you can stand it, anyway.

thats really the only thing, anyone who has an ounce of self reflect would do to the ex-mother in law after hearing that. Shock therapy as mentioned earlier is the only way to make the story work and its rather flawed and well, cruel. It fits with the mother's history perhaps but that she never told the husband and now blames it on him? Shes almost as nuts as Myriam.

Reading now just to see how sillier it gets.

-Hexx

Genetically she inherited her mental instability from her mother. The mother is insane, it only takes a few lines from her to understand that. The daughter is also insane. The piece of trash he was seduced into marrying found a way to fuck anyone she wanted to but have a home and protection to run back to. Without that protection, which she wants back, she has only herself to blame for her actions and behavior and must take personal responsibility for those actions. Something she has no real desire to do. She blames him for destroying her by the set up in Dallas and her depravity. She was a paid whore who accepted the job without knowing he was involved. SHe willingly had sex with those men and enjoyed it. Only after she found out he knew about it was she upset and tormented by those actions. Put another way, she couldnt tell him any longer it wasnt true and she just loved him, that was obviously a lie. Now that she knows he is strong enough to reject her, she has run off and is hiding with a new name and a new set of pimps. Her mother in her insane was blames him for running her daughter away from him. Put another was she is a whore and fucks any and every body. Your job as a husband is to just sit back and let her do whatever she wants to do there is nothing more insane that attempted suicide. She, by her bareback sex, is attempting suicide everytime she fucks one of her johns. In that room in Dallas where she enjoyed the sex so much lost men could have snuffed her as the completing act. She never knows when one of the johns in his own insane line kills her for whatever reason his twisted mind comes up with. The mother by her actions and behavior seems to have encouraged the insane behavior of her daughter helping to further the twisted logic of her mind. Did I enjoy this story, not really. Was it erotic, not at all. Once I saw the very twisted logic in this story I kept reading to see how the writer, who is skilled with words but skill with words doesnt make a story good, would pull herself/himself out of this blackhole in some credible way. I predicted "Estelle" would attempt to injure, destroy, or kill him, she did by trying to get them back together, then by physical injury. I am surprised she didnt castrate him after he went down, it would have fit the logic of the story. After all she several times called him a bore. He was a paycheck, a lifestyle, and a cover nothing more. For those of you that like this dribble, everyone has their preferences just because you like this doesnt mean everyone that doesnt like it is wrong, you seem to think like Estelle.........

Very well writen piece of junk - unfortunately a skill with words does not make an author. Next time try writing a recipe, you might be better at it than writing erotic stories

You make us feel such emotion for the characters. Anxiously waiting to see how this story plays out.

I can't see any other way for this not to be insulting to the reader besides a wizard being involved somehow.

Great story up until then, though.

I really love your writing; it's the plot here that's become over the top (even for a Loving Wives story.)

As another reader noted, it's really now a SF/Fantasy tale. Will a Fairy Godmother pop out at the end and make everything OK?

Nevertheless, thanks for sharing your story.

Is this erotic? No it is not. Is this story believeable? No it is not. IT is FUN to read? It it is not. And the premise becomes More absurd with each chapter.

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<b>WHY is Bruce STILL trying to help? WHY?</b> if Bruce REALLY believes the Myriam/ Estelle thing HE cant help her. She needs deep serious trained Mental help.

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<b>Assume the wife does have MPD. Now suppose Later in the story Bruce finds her Helps & saves her in SOME MANNER. Would You believe that to be possible? </b>

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Not me.

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More absurdity? Here's one: If Myriam's mother hated Bruce and did NOT want him to marry Myriam... why not say <i>Bruce dear Myriam is fucking crazy and is whore</i>...?

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Come on folks this is not Brain surgery.

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And we still dont know WHY Bruce after all this time and pain... after 2 years of being over her... cares more NOW then when he married her?

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as I stated in chapter 1 Bruce's total ignorance of what and who Myriam was when they got married is absurd. With the revelation that she/Estelle was fucking half the college... and Bruce never had a clue makes this story a even more waste of space with its incomprehensible compliation of idoitic contrived plot twists.

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Once again Anguiquesophie has AGAIN developed such a weak shallow Gay Like Hetro man there is NO one in the story to like or identify with. Every husband in her LW stories features the same thing.

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Bruce's Love...IF that is what this weak stupid shallow man has... does NOT mean he is trained or qualify to handle what Myriam/ Estelle is... assuming we buy the MPD thing.

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<b>This way beyond HIS ability to help. </b>

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In some ways if Myriam is "gone" BRUCE did kill her. His silly plan has turned out to be a disaster in every way.

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When Estelle Kneed Bruce in the balls and he doubled over in pain I was surprised. Bruce has Testicles? when did THAT happen?!?!!?

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this is geting worse with every chapter. Good writing can only shine up so much shit.

As was said in "Alice and Wonderland," "Curiouser and curiouser." I'm really confused by this episode and where it is going. What bothers me is the idea that Bruce married Myriam with honorable intentions, yet Myriam and her mother Kathleen did not reveal Myriam's psychiatric illness to him, both knowing it would come out eventually. That is a betrayal of the worst kind. It is like failing to reveal you can't conceive, or failing to reveal that you are bisexual, or that you have terminal cancer. These should all be revealed before the presumably lifetime commitment of marriage. Bruce has become so messed up over this. He can't save Myriam. He can't reform the prostitute, he can't cure the mentally ill. But it has become an obsession for him. Love does not conquer all, he is wasting his time. The fact that he can't let this go implies Bruce is a weak character who is seriously fucked up. I guess there is no hero to this story and the story, as I said once before, will probably end sadly and badly. Well-written as always.

Just keep writing. Not sure where your going and I hope you dont turn this guy into a total wimp but you do write well.

Since a lot of what is written in Literotica is fantasy what not have the semi happy ending. Have Bruce enlist is new lesbian friend and do battle against Estelle. Once you introduced the dual personalities there is every reason for him to fight for Myr to resurface. PI's can find her and then some fun with deprogramming maybe. Estalle might remain in the end but only as Bruces whore. His love keep him going this long. It should now be strong enough todo battle for Myr to exist, even if it is not with him. What he originally did, although misguided, was the only way he felt he could get past things. He made a mistake. We all do. Now correct it. Hunt her down and use Estelle against herself.

I love the people who comment in the Loving Wives catagory. Charming bunch of idiots aren't they?

Not a bad story, but you should ask Laurel to move it to the Romance or the Novels cat. I'm looking forward to Ch 7 to see where you go with this plot and to see if you can maintain continuity. Cheers!

Please continue the story...I want to see where and how it ends. Ignore the stupid comments. If they don't like it, why are they still reading it and then spreading their bile over the rest of us? The story is not pretty, not a "nice" love story...it is a story of torment and attempted resolution. Will it end with peace? Only you know, but keep us along for the ride.

understand the working of the brain I am waiting for the continuation. I am not a nero surgeon nor shrink. The basis of this story is deep...Jung and Freud would love to address this one

Bruce should take the ex-mother in laws advice. STOP looking for the ex wife, who ever she is. As for the comments, well the writer wanted a response from us and she has got them. I still don't like people who insult a writer just because they don't like a story. Insult the story by all means but the writer? I don't think so.

This is, so far, a fascinating story with all the etchings of an interested and informed writer. I like the writing and the swirling plots, the partial answers and ever-widening questions. Please continue!

While the story is in some ways impossible and the characters have few positive characteristics it has been very interesting. Unfortunately the very short chapters have grown tiring so Im out. Will continue it when its finished...

Alas, but given the direction that plot is taking us, there doesn't really seem to be a resolution short of Estelle/Myriam's death — be it from AIDS, murdered by a client, or maybe a murder/suicide taking poor Bruce along with her on the way out! But E/M has been portrayed as too intractably crazy for any 'cure.' To be honest, of course Bruce would be best off half-a-world away from this psycho woman, but he seems to be one of those people with an overpowering urge to try and 'fix' his doomed love.

Having taken us through a very factual picture of Multiple Personality Disorder based on extreme sexual abuse, I dare you to have Bruce get her to creditable psychiatric treatment and possible healing.

Well I for one, am still hanging in there

Everyone one of her stories have been well written...all of us are curious on how she will tie this together!

Basically this is not an erotic tale and it is a very painful one. I am almost curious to know if Harry and some of others who are violently against the work ever read science fiction?

My problem is that I have been reading sf for over 60 years and do not have problems with extrapolations by other people even beyond the rules of the scientific community. Actually there are all sorts of article in the physics literature about time travel and matter transport showing that these are possibilities under special circumstances.

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On the other hand, This is not "True Stories" and most of the authors are using their imaginations mixed with experience. I do not see anymore reason to obey the current social science canons, than to obey the physical science canons (most of the work that I read about today were absurd or impossible to the average scientist thirty years ago).

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Finally, IMO it very limiting to require that there must be a character in the story that I identify with... I am a strange bird and would not have any fiction to read...

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All of the above were comments about the comments of the commentators. Getting back to the story, the author loves to get her characters into a state of complete despair and she closed down this chapter with us all climbing the wall together with Kathleen, Bruce and Myriam. A word of warning the author among other crimes almost never winds her stories up in an unambiguous manner... Perhaps some of those who are complaining at the moment will complain a lot more when it ends....

The old axiom was never truer.

Those that can, do.

Those that can't, leave inane comments!

Great writing and a fascinating storyline.

Thank you.

I'm not sure which is the greater tragedy here; Myriam's self-destructive MPD or Bruce's self-destructive obsession with her. He keeps picking at the scab and the wound can't heal; instead, he just makes it worse. I personally learned - the hard way - you cannot help someone who does not want your help. This is one of those times you can't avoid the temptation to grab Bruce by the lapels, shake him vigorously and scream: "Listen, Bud; you divorced her. Get on with your life. If she wants to talk to you, she'll call you!"

With all that said, angiquesophie is masterful at painting this human train wreck with her words. Contrary to popular belief, Life's traumas cannot be neatly wrapped up in forty-two minutes, plus commercials. I DO hope we can have some closure on this soon, but I will try my damndest to gut it out to the end, regardless.

The writing continues to be excellent. The story has now taken an interesting turn. I would like Bruce to have asked the mother in law why Myr wasn't hospitalized and why he wasn't told. So many questions I can't wait to have answered. Keep up this compelling tale.

The writing is good as everyone says. But the story is starting to get pretty tedious. I know that soap operas last for years on television and are entertaining for a long, long time. But the story line here is just getting boring. I don't see a sympathetic character left standing. Bruce needs to get a life. Estelle needs to go screw a football team. And Estelle's Mom just needs to go back to where she came from. I'll check back in at say chapter 28 and see if old Bruce is any closer to finding whatever it is he is looking for. This story seems to have contracted what I call the "GaryAPB" Disease. Great writing, but way too slow to end the story.

was in love with was the make believe woman he lived with which had no real basis in reality. Her whole life with his is but a series of lies and deceptions. He loved a shadow that he knows now never existed. He can get on with his life knowing her never loved his wife in any way shape or form. That is reality. If E/M had any concept of humanity instead of manipulating her ex by talking of suicide she would rid the world of a worthless piece of trash.

Another excellent chapter in this engrossing tale. Is it the final episode? Could be; loose ends do not necessarily need tying. Many, many thanks for a good read!

Three minor technical points at the end of this chapter:

“Why would you believe Myriam was the most important of the two, anyway?” -- try the comparative instead of the superlative.

“And I had no intentions of crossing it.” -- singular is better than plural.

“You won't find her -- never again.” -- drop the “n.”

"You won't find her -- never again. You killed her, you stupid man. She is gone."

AS, I love your writing. You have some wonderful insights into the human condition, but how exactly is Bruce supposed to succeed without the knowledge which failed the experts and her family?

And now he has(some)understanding, can we really believe that the "stupid man" will achieve what the experts couldn't?

On past form, however, I'm expecting you to pull it off. I'm looking forward to the conclusion.

I know he really loves her. he has overlooked alot. But I will be interested to see haow the get back together if they do

Finally, he hit her with how she was always a sanctimonious prude with him even as she was being the whore he wanted (for himself) with other men.<p>

As for Myr's mother, fuck her. With what the mother knew about Myr-Estelle the only thing she should've felt for Bruce was sympathy and understanding. In fact she failed him during the entire marriage since she knew about her daughter and still she left Bruce in the dark. For her to dislike Bruce is horrible. For her to say he killed the last vestiges of Myr is both cruel and insane.<p>

I can definitely say that while I would've stuck by Myr to this point, much as Bruce has, this last meeting in the hotel where Estelle made her appearance would've finished me off. At that point I'd easily write her off. She's not worth it since there is no real woman there for me to cling to anymore. I'd be able to walk away and move on at that point and I wouldn't still keep looking back, the way he had been for the last few years.<p>

Estelle may have ruined everything but at least she did me this one little favor.

I thought this was supposed to be a site for erotic stories? Compared to this story reading the description on the back of a pack of dish cloths is more erotic

insanity runs in the family and it looks like its about to get Bruce. Come out come out wherever you are Bruce, its time for you to become crazy too.

This chapter was hard for me to place in context of the story. It could become clearer as the story moves along. It certainly adds complexity to Myriam's character.

Still a favorite. Still love it. Still five stars.

No, he didn’t kill her, you did you stupid bitch. Her mother should at least have explained this to him way before they ever got married. She says that she never liked him because she knew that his marriage with his daughter would never last because of Estelle and what did she do to prevent that? What did she do to make him understand her daughter? She did nothing! She’s such a hypocrite blaming him, if she knew of the problems her daughter were having, myriam knew the threat Estelle is making towards her marriage yet they didn’t fight it. She should’ve taken her daughter to seek real medical help, make her husband understand and stick by her side, if Myriam was strong enough to make deals and be in control of both personalities then she’ll have the strength to destroy her other side with the help of everyone that loves her and her doctors. But fuck all that, she decided along with her mother that her husband was an asshole and their marriage will eventually end. That’s exactly why they decided not to tell him about Estelle, they don’t want her to find happiness or be in control.

Thanks for sharing.

the hell would her mom know what happened?

You really shouldn't throw around a term like schizophrenia without bothering to learn what it is. Her symptoms aren't remotely related to schizophrenia.

Otherwise it's a fairly good story. I didn't really buy the guys idea to "kill" off any feelings he had for his ex with the hired gangbang. A bit over the top and not really in keeping with his character. But other than that I've liked the story. A bit predictable at times or maybe just good foreshadowing.

If you weren't raped, or foced to watch one as a kid, or a mental health practioner, you might re-consider your vehemence in attacking the Dx of this as mental illness.

Well I can say the mother is one vain person, why if she new all this did she choose not to help, I am guessing that her actually supporting the marriage, and been hoest with him with what he was getting into would have proved more of a help that this farce she just put.

Ok...i am a mental health professional..i have a masters in abnormal psychology... A phd dissertation on schizoaffective disorder. So i know about the psyche, yet still i am enjoying this tale. Even though Bruce cannot possibly help this woman and he is in for ALOT of pain if he tries to do so. I can suspend my disbelief and come to like this. At first through the 2 chapters i just thought this was about a weak man loving a cold bitch. Then the turn happened and i thought interesting but implausible. Now i have hopes that he moves on complete in the knowledge that his marriage failure was in no way his fault and find love, but i know the author won't allow this. So ill stay till the end. But know people that less that 1% of the population have Dissociative identity disorder. And of that 1% half are considered to be faking it for legal/excusive reasons. So while if faced with this dilemma my experience would not allow me to believe this, i still wanna see where this journey goes.

Can our hero rescue her from herself? Can he meld them into the one person, the sexually voracious and chaste Mystelle? Or can he split himself in two and have each of his halves marry Myr and Estelle separately? The answers? Soon to come, same bat-crazy bat-channel!

That's some sci-fi bullshit. But anyway, how does her mother know all this? Didn't "Estelle" swore "Myriam" to secrecy and in any case Myriam is dead?

Psycho babble. This idea of split personality has been thoroughly disproven. Also this angie is really am awful author...

Not worth the fight bro, no matter what conglomeration of personalities Estelle is part of her and always will be. Let's see what reality you create for em.

Bruce! It’s time to run. Run as fast and as hard as you possibly can.