The Mechanic Ch. 03

Nice job!

I've come to expect superb work from thecelt and I'm seldom disappointed. This story is one of the better ones. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Thecelt rules

Good story -no wimps here.

A Good Story...

It was clear that she could not be truthful and he finally got his life straight. It was a good ending. Thanks.

I'm afraid the husband is a wimp

In the end the husband in this story is a wimp. I have no sympathy for him. What were the consequences he met out to his slut of a wife? NONE! She cheats on him throughout the marriage and he does not check to see if Polly is his daughter. He will pay for her the rest of his life and never know the chump he was played for. Even in the end she demeans him with this statement: "I never stopped loving you, Jesse. Drake is a distraction, nothing more. He does love me but I never loved him. And Polly is your daughter. Don't you ever doubt it. I swear to you on my life that you are her father!"
She never started loving him. He was a meal ticket for the word go. Polly is his daughter because why? She says so, and her word means? Nothing! And then there is the Drake is a distraction, who needs a distraction from someone they love? And Jesse's reaction to all this? I'll pay for the girl even if it it's mine. And by doing so I'll pay for you to fuck whoever including Drake. Get a DNA test fuck sakes. You can still get visitation and back support from Drake. All in all Jesse is a wimp.

Excellent!

This chapter wraps up the loose ends and resolves any hanging questions. Nice work.
-- KK in Texas

Sorry to those who didn't like this story.

The time for cutting his loses is now. He got what he came for. A pity his wife couldn't keep her legs closed. But now he knows about it he is gone. I suppose the only thing the husband didn't get is revenge on Drake. Perhaps in time he will do. As for those people who are calling him a wimp. Well that just isn't true. A wimp would stay and get sloppy seconds from Drake, a wimp would stay and go partying with the wife and let Drake humiliate him time and time again. He would sit in a corner and watch while Drake and heather had sex. THAT is what a wimp would do! Personally I think the husband did everything he could to try and stay married. After all they do still love each other. At the very least he could be accused of being blinded by love at worst he could be called a fool for trusting his wife. But a wimp? I don't think so. Anyway as always Celt good story, if nothing else it got us talking about it.

Great Job!

Great Job! Keep up the good work! We look foward to seeing your next story!

Wife needs some help

She lies to her husband from when they dated til the divorce, lies to her friends, lies to her parents, and heck is probably lying to Drake. She should go see one of the doctors in the hospital that she works at and get some kind of treatment/medication. The husband did make a mistake in proposing even though he was concerned with her behavior, but don't think he's at fault for trusting his wife to be faithful or his child to actually be his. Just glad that he finally learned the truth, made a decision, and was on his way back to where he could find real happiness.

Another fine story!

I'm sad because of the outcome but I loved the story.

Great

Nice __Liked it a lot

A Well-written but Very Sad Story

Another tragedy in the classic sense. Thank goodness Jesse has a real relationship going with Shawn. Everybody lost in this story, especially Polly. Very sad story.

Great Story Telling

Interesting that we have one nay sayer and the rest loved it.
In truth, he would be a wimp if he allowed Heather to define things or accepted the demand to have a DNA run and then run a legal suit against Drake! He decides what he is going to do or believe. He feels that Polly is his daughter. Divorcing Heather and kicking the shit, within reasonable limits, out of Drake leaves him satisfied and lets him move on to a better life. Great!!
One thing that bothered me in the story structure was that once Shawn and Billy were on the Map. There was no other way for a visit to Heather end up happily.....
Thanks Celt for the tale

One of the Bast

This story was a true piece of masterful craftmanship and passion. When in life you deal with deceit and lies, you handle it the best way possible, as the author presents. Some may agree some may disagree. You were not there how can you judge.

Excellent story and enjoyed every minute of it, thank you for sharing.

Too trustful yes - Wimp no!

Jesse wanted to believe the best in his wife and she took advantage of that trust to get what she wanted - a good time. Heather knew that Drake would treat her like his chief slut at best. She lied twice in the same talk about her wherabouts that night! While her husband was been beaten up she was fucking Drake. While she was "so called waiting for Jesse's return to her" she was fucking Drake. The end was disappointing when it became clear what kind of person Heather was. I know that Jesse wanted to see his duaghter in the future but to comfort the woman responsbile for his leaving town in disgrace? Even when Heather knew that Jesse was in town after 2 years absence she still went out with Drake. Heather lied to everybody! So now Jesse will continue to support his daughter(?)while Heather brings Drake around openly? What prevents Drake from getting Jesse killed? Despite these holes in the ending I enjoyed every word of this story! Thanks!

Very compelling!

I liked this story very much. It portrayed true to life characters, which means internal turmoil, conflicting feelings and periods of indecision and weakness. Especially remarkable is the fact that despite the wife’s disturbing behaviors and the husband’s own short comings neither comes across as a stereotype in black or white or as a monster or a super hero. Mind you, the implied author is by no means neutral. It's quite clear that the sympathy of the story goes with the husband. And yet the story is able to portray both characters as credible human beings - no monsters or super heroes please! Now, that's a real achievement in my book!
My only critique is that too often the counting of the wife's sins felt redundant and could have been edited out (as we have heard it several times before).
Thanks for this compelling read!

it's too silly

totally unbelievable; only 10-to-13-year-olds talk and act and believe things like this.

within a few lines, the hero's thoughts went from doubting Polly being his kid to accepting her as his kid, AS HE did a total demolish on Heather's lies, making her cry in relief, knowing that she can't fool him any more about Drake.

"You are wrong, Jesse, when it comes to love. I love you ONLY; Drake --- now that I know you know what I have been doing with him before we were married to the time you left and your DEDUCTION with respect to what he and I've been doing since you left --- has been just a distraction. No love."

And NOW Jesse has NO DOUBT ABOUT POLLY'S PATERNITY? LOL

again, only pre-logical adolescents think and "reason" like this. sorry to rain on your parade....

Another Good One

A well told story revolving around the question of 'did she or didn't she'. That question is resolved as Jesse catches Heather in one lie after another. My one quibble is that the story could have had greater tension without the presence of Shawn and Billie.

The end?

Great story - unsure if this was the end or not. I can see great potential for a continuation but this is, of course, a matter for 'thecelt' to resolve.
Please keep up the good work.
Thanks for your hard work and talented writing. The title of 'Author' rests easy with my views of your prowess.
Norman

Fine Story

Agree with a previous comment about 13 year olds. Wife is an immature child and needs to grow up. Liked the story.

Real Fragile People & Some Stupid Ones

This Author has the ability to paint people in the situational reality he wishes. He doesn't get in front of himself nor does he abandon a credible path.

Some might wish him to be more severe but that isn't his style nor is it the way life usually works. There is always a blind spot and a want to believe until the evidence is irrefutable.

Life is full of imperfect people just pushing through it the best they can oftentimes stumbling either maliciously or unintentionally. Life is like that in basic.

Author - you are appreciated and looked forward to.

With High Regard

bs

allright celt, ur one of the top 5 authors till this one. why did she marry jesse? unless he's a fool, why was he forking over the long green? i find it difficult to believe the cad was out delivering cars to the lady the pm after getting a crushed nose and dental sx. why would jesse leave his daughter without filing? going 2 yrs wout seeing ur daughter sure wouldn't look good in court.

Interesting but it is hard to like either of them.

He really needs to do a DNA test on the daughter and finally he grew some balls to get rid of this fucked-up slut. It is somewhat amazing what "love" will blind rational people to because that slut definitely had his number. Most disappointing is the fact that the slut-exwife never suffers - she got away with it and got to have the "cake & icing" also. Henceforth, it is really hard to like either of them. In reality, this particular story is very similar to Angiquesophie's "Two's a crowd" man-hating story. If you simply reverse the male/female roles it would fit with Angiquesophie's sad stories. In any case, 75 for a well written story but not higher due to the unrealistic nature of these two main characters.

Another very good one!

I like it! I have as much trouble as Jesse understanding her lies. She just won't quit to save her life. He is much better off going on with what he has. It really does make me wonder why she ever wanted to marry him.
Thanks for another fine tale.
Now if we could get some more TT Spaulding...

Pretty nicely written story but lots of plot holes

I liked the story but there were quite a few plot holes. First, Jesse was quite traceable. He used his old health insurance to get patched up in the Emergency Room in his new city of residence. Such can be researched by police or by a private detective. Second, his taxes are deducted from his paycheck and he must file Federal and State Income tax forms, listing his social security number, all of which are traceable. I'm assuming, of course, that he did not just get a new identity, new SS number, etc. and based on the story, he did not. Third, the cash he sent out of his paycheck to Heather and Polly did not "prove" he was a responsible parent. Since it was pure cash, rather than a check deposited by Heather on Polly's behalf, how could Jesse prove he regularly sent money? If it came to a divorce filing by Heather, Jesse could not really prove a thing and he could definitely be cited for abandonment. In fact, he could be forced to pay two years' back alimony and child support because he couldn't prove he sent any money at all. I'm really astonished that Heather (as well as her mother Grace) acknowledged receipt of that money, as it would have been in keeping with Heather's character for her not to mention it. A fourth point is that a two year old child is not self-aware. A child must be five years old for that stage in development. With his two year absence, I doubt four year old Polly remembers her Daddy at all, since she was just two when he departed. Finally, I agree with other comments that Heather has lied so much, it is doubtful that Polly is really his biologic child. So why would he consider Polly to be his daughter, biologic or not, when he has not had any relationship with her for the past two years (and in real life, she would barely remember him, if at all)?

Follow up to comments

It was interesting to read the points made by the recent commentators. While they made sense in principle, in my opinion they were not in tune with where the story was going.
As far as the daughter’s biological father, I have not read any illusion on the husband’s part that the daughter is his biologically. All I saw was his decision to take responsibility for her as her father because he had an emotional bond with her. No one forced or tricked him to do it. In fact, he is the one who first mentioned it and he never reverses it to the end of the story. Being her father is different than being her biological father of course. But he decided that nobody is going to take away from him what he decided to have. Think, if indeed the daughter was not his, and he still wanted to maintain his parental rights, it was not in his interest to initiate paternity tests and risk loosing his daughter to his arch enemy...
As far as the wholes in the plot regarding the ability to trace him and other matters related to the pending divorce. The way the story ends, the husband decides to cut his loses and they separate in an amicable way. He realized that even if she loved him, her emotional and characterlogical problem make her the person she is; namely an unstable and unreliable in committed relations. In short, she is not a marriage material even if she loved. It does not make her a monster but he is very clear now that they will never be together. On the other hand, it's in HIS interest not to be vengeful at this point. He has great new life elsewhere. And if he wants good healthy relations with his daughter, the best approach for him is to keep good relations with his ex.
I don't believe it's correct that the wife comes out from this crisis with no pain or consequences. The premise is that she is immature and flawed. But she did love and proffered him over others as her husband. As a result of her lack of impulse control her big life plan fell apart. While she did want to keep partying while still being married (aka eat the cake and keep it) – what she learns is that you can’t have it all and all she is left with is a guy she does not love - full time, a broken family and the person she loved most – gone. I am sure that those were painful lessons for her. In addition she learned that she could not treat people as means to her ends (namely one man is for fun the other for family and safety) and that she is simply not smart enough to use lies as a way to cover her mistakes. The price: loosing any credibility. Perhaps all of the above would be painful enough for her to let her grow and make better choices in the future. (thecelt: a follow up?)

Celt, gotta give you the apology here..........

.......I honestly thought you'd go for the forced romance ending, where the guy was done wrong, but somehow got convinced he was making something out of nothing and the other person showed him how his macho pride got in the way of a good thing (though because of what the other person may have done that is always debatable), this was better than I thought with logic to match the ending, so I thought

Often times the way I vote or comment, is based on the story and how realistic it is to me. Let me go on a tangent her for a second. Among my friends I got voted "Someone to confess and Guardian of their secrets" and apparently no one told me I was up for the position and it wasn't something I was going to get the chance to refuse or resign from at a future date. Everyone calls me to talk over their problems. And as such I've had the front row seat for quite a few things that either happened to me or I witnessed.

Take this story for instance. It is pretty close to what happened to a buddy of mine about 8 years back. My wife worked with his ex-wife, and where this story had a decent ending for the husband, the real life version didn't work like that for him. This may be why I like stories where the husband doesn't get screwed over, and often I see a romantic ending to a story where the husband was screwed over as not believable.

In what I witnessed his wife was cheating on him with a guy that worked across the street from the bank. One day my wife asked me if I was "really" good friends with him, and I told her I knew him since he was 9, so I thought I was. She said she thought his girlfriend, the one he was going to marry in about 8 months, was cheating on him with a guy across the street, and that she went to a lot of parties with this guy. I wanted more proof so I asked her somethings, but filed it away. It was about month later when she told me that his girlfriend was commenting about the great party he took her too, and how they spent the night together, that I called him and talked to him. After verifying that he didn't go to the party because his girlfriend said she was sick and was staying home, I told him what I knew. And guess what happened? He blasted me for trying to ruin his relationship with his girlfriend. I just let him, told him I was sorry to have called, and hung up. Needless to say I wasn't invited to the wedding.

Fast forward 2 years, I get a phone call one day out of the blue and it's him. I was stunned, but I tried to be civil. He asked me if the bank ever had my wife work over time. I said it depends. They call her to work extra days, but usually she's home by 6 (at the time, its now 7 since the branch stays open later). He said, so they never have her work over till 10 or 11pm? When I said no, he thanked me and hung up. It was only later I found out that for a year she had been telling him she worked over 2 or 3 nights a week and some times Saturdays till 8pm. Once he followed her and caught her with the guy she had been cheating on him with he asked for a divorce. I'm not sure what type of attorney he got, but he lost half of what he owned and had to sell the house he had before they got married and split the money. While the ink was still wet on the divorce decree, she took what she gotten from the divorce, the next day moved in with the guy she had been sleeping with before they got married, and then later married this guy. It was only last year he got re-married to someone else. Almost 6 years after she screwed him over. He was gun shy for almost 4 years before he started dating again. She appeared happy almost from the end of her marriage and at the same time, he was miserably and got screwed over from start to finish.

That's what amazes me. A lot of stories here are "similar" to things I've seen first hand, but the endings aren't very believeable. Any way I owe you an appology for my wrong prediction earlier. (^_^)

-Risq

EXCELLENT

Great plot, it pulled my anticipation in one direction then had me going in another. Great character development, too. Although, Jesse's character hits a little too close to home. I tend to believe what people tell me but I was blessed with a good memory especially when it comes to conversations. They tend to stick with me for years and I often catch people double back on themselves. You painted Heather as an habitual liar, perfectly. Very entertaining, Thank you I always look forward to reading your stories.

remeberence

Sir, the edge your stories used too carry seems to me as being lost. As I state without being disrespectful,you do your self, and your reputation,a disservice.Your stories the last three times, I have not only looked forward to them, as was you being the writer, but as always in the past the potential for an exceptional, well thought out, and written journey. Your ability as a writer is exceptional. Why have you not only become predictable in your writing, but stopped pushing the edge? A leader leads. A follower follows. In my humble opinion, as I am not a writer, please remember what, and why you made a difference in this genre. In this story you made a good man run for a plausible reason. The humility he was to face by staying was realistic. His resolve upon his return was not. As I state this is my opinion. Your past history of work lends your reader to expect better than predictable. Again. I am neither your judge nor jury. Just a faithful reader. Food for thought in what I hope will always be your next story..or should I say journey. You are truly a talented writer. I found this story lacking by the standards you have you have set. Again I state, this is my opinion. Thank you sir for your time. Don McLellan

Good writing but ...

Whilst your writng is well up to its usual standards I do feel there are a couple of holes in the plot. Primarily these arise from her more priviledged background. I really do not see that party girl Heather would have remained in the trailer park. Neither would her mother tolerate it. Despite the claims that Heather was a good liar, her mother would not be fooled by the clothes she wore when she arrived home in exactly the same way that Jesse was not. Nor would Drake, in his arrogance, miss the opportunity to present the car to her himself. Personally, I'd torch the bitch.

The pain doesn't really go away

It doesn't matter if you're completely right or if you have some blame in the failure of your marriage. The pain of a child never goes away. I feel so sorry for the child in this story.

Frankly, I feel sorry for everyone, except the goons. The wife has been conditioned to believe that lies will work that she can head off trouble by presenting a "truth" that others want to believe. She didn't want to hurt her husband, at least not to more than a tiny fraction of what she did, but she didn't have the character to understand that sometimes lies just don't work.

I feel sorry for the husband because he was an innocent victim, right up to the time he decided to run. Again a character flaw, but he'd been conditioned to avoid hard truths too.

Looking back from a long marriage, I know that the most important thing isn't just "love," or "trust," or "good sex," it is the character of the person you choose. There have been times in the last 40 years when I didn't feel any of the above for my wife, and I know there were times she didn't feel them for me. Yet because of our character we moved past the bad times, and we both thank God for each other.

I know there were times when I would have enjoyed an affair, I could "have fallen in love" with someone else, but nothing is as valuable as having a life partner, someone who you KNOW is there for you as you will be there for them!

thecelt, I love your stories. I missed this one because I generally just check the LW category. I would like to see you write a story of a long term marriage that survives the hard knocks that life throws at us.

alternate

i know this is old but i just finished reading this story and could not help but think it would have been interesting if the husband would have asked his wife to return with him and the child just to force her say no.

A Home Run

Finally a story where the male character has some spine. Overall there was good character development, logical actions for the most part, good time line. Technically and gramatically correct.I have a new favorite author on literotica.

Gotta have someone to cheer for, Celt

And you didn't give us one.

Great Story

I agree word for word with PeacefulinTX. I too have a life partner only... I too have sometimes wished I had found romance and real sex with another...but did not want to give up what I had. I could not ever have left my children...

good story. It's believable and well written

This story by a superb story teller is tops. Character development is at a premium; the husband's status in his hometown seems to be that of underdog. He is looked down on by Heather's parents which may have contributed to heather's problems in totally accepting her husband. He has friends but cannot compete with Drake, his gang, and his money and power, this coupled with heather's desire to party. Heather just is not the marrying type and she would probably be a failure as a wife with any serious man, so I do not accept Heather's impression of Drake as being a inferior candidate for husband. What I did not like is the story's ending. Although I think the husband has done the right thing in going back to Shawn and her son, he left Polly with Heather, which to my thinking could result in emotional problems for Polly later. Polly needs at least one loving parents and it sure is not Polly (or even her maternal grandmother). Though the story was too rushed at its ending, Celt has composed another fine Loving Wife tale - he seldom disappoints his fans. RAG

Check the DNA, the bitch is a proven liar.

Liars Lie. That is it. Check the DNA and let the rich lover boy pay for the kid. He should at least be sure.

Be nice if the lying cheating slut bitch would have a convenient "accident".

That way he would be able to remove his daughter from that horrible situation. Drake, as described, is a danger to any child of his.

bitch...

Wife is a whore and a complete piece of shit.

Ok, all of you complaining about his bitch wife ...

Please tell me what is so admirable about him! Didn't he desert his daughter? Didn't he sleep around on his wife while still married? Come on!

Compulsive liar

The only way the story would have been better IMO, would be if she had had to face up to all the lies she told everyone else. Hell, she even blamed him when she told her daughter the reason Daddy wasn't coming home was because HE found someone else, when she had a man on the side all along.

Good story

Good ending.

Loved it

The ending actually surprised me. I expected her to be pining away for him and for him to then have to decide between these two women. Only thing lacking was better development of the Heather character. She had everyone fooled (I.e. Mom, friends, even her husband for years) yet was living a double life. What was her real motivation? Why did she still want Jesse? What kind of person is she? Five stars for a high quality tale.

Confusing

Needed to see the actual event between Heather and Drake. With just the he said, she said after the fact, I still don't feel like I know what happened.

@SplitAces Re: Confusing

While there were a lot of lies told, and that might make it SEEM confusing, but unless I'M confused, both the night he intended to propose, and the night he got beaten up, she was with Drake, and she probably also gave Drake her virginity, or at least had sex with him in the past.

Other Thoughts

“But she told me she had no use for him, ever. She always said she would rather die than be married to someone like him." – Strange, that didn’t stop her from going out with him on that 4th of July!

“I let him touch me earlier just to make him less suspicious. That was my mistake and that's what you saw. I swear to you that all I said was the truth.” – That doesn’t explain where she was all that night, why didn’t she go after him?

Second time through...

Great job of throwing me off track. I really was starting to believe she was true. Five stars.

lie

It's easy for beautiful women to lie. They know they have power over men from early on in life. In their teens they perfect the ability to twist reality to be as pretty as they are.

Vulcan is exactly right.

He would have been found in 2 days TOPS.

He is right about the cash too. Stupid stupid move.

Now for the shit part

Father waits TWO fucking years to see his daughter and STILL wouldn't have unless he had a car to deliver right near there.

Who knows if he EVER would have seen her.

That is not a father. A father is more than sending money. A father does not ever ever run away from his child, unless he is a Class A lowlife douchebag.

Only 2 fucking years of abandonment later does he start wanting to see his daughter?

This is the second story I have read from you celt. The fist was that home early one where you had the husband abandon his wife for 2 years.

Now you have the father abandon his daughter for 2 years.

I guess it is not a one off.

I pray you have no children. I shudder to think of the values (or lack of) you would be teaching them. You have a disgusting idea of what marriage and fatherhood is. I have no doubt you would pass it on to any children and they will pass that on.

Won't be reading any more of yours, asshole.

Please do not have children!

Mostly liked this.

Only drawback was his abandonment of his daughter.

That truly sucked.

so wrong

this story ended sooooooo wrong